Many people like this poem. People are seeking encouragement in a depressing world. I like this stanza the best:
"There’s certain to be battle, a war to be won
No day leaves time to surrender
Pain brings strength, sorrow brings love
And charity brings joy- the greatest gift ever"
Very good insight, Edward, about life's push and pull, tug of war.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thank you very much for the encouraging review, life is too short to be miss
Live in the present,dwell not in the past.. take whatever chance you can.,it may be your last!! The message is very insightful.Life is not transient we need to take out of it as much as we can.Not succumbing to the huddles but overcoming it with courage and confidence..That will define us.. Nice write friend.
~Sophy
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thank you Sophy for have stop by and review my poem. it mean a lot
I hope that my honesty does not come across as rudeness and also that I am not misunderstood but your positivity drives me bananas. And as I type this I do smile. And I share with you many of the precepts although I think is the way we interpret them or assimilate them is diametrically opposed. And the lack of balance that I just refer to makes me think that you wish for this to be? Like it lives in you as hope or maybe the cultural differences are to great for me to relate to this kind of feeling.
But what cannot be refuted is that it is a postive message and as such it carries obvious goodness.
Thankyou for the invite Edward.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thank you for the honest review, for me there only a good positive cause human never created from ne.. read morethank you for the honest review, for me there only a good positive cause human never created from negative tension or some bold torch
I love the essence of this!! The biggest suggestion I would give is to make sure each line flows into the next more smoothly! Poetry is a lot about flow! But I adore the message! Life IS short, and it's a blessing, so LIVE it, daily! Don't take it for granted!
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thanks for the review Grace, i will improve to be more better
I have no doubt you'll do just fine!! Keep on writing! xoxo
10 Years Ago
many things i should learn between vocabulary and grammar, there still a lot of homework. Thank you .. read moremany things i should learn between vocabulary and grammar, there still a lot of homework. Thank you grace for keep supporting me. that mean a lot to me
Life worth living is a good life lesson for all writers to learn and the expressions will grow with faith hope and love by our side to inspire our poetry and our stories tellings ways. This is a good creative write full of blessings and imagination of a well seasoned writer.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thank you for stop by an read the poem. real life and purpose to be live in
I LOVE THIS ... so refreshing to read words so full of zest and life and blossoming goodness, as I read down the lines I became happier and happier to know that YES ... there is another soul out there that knows 'life is here now let's live it!!'
Thank YOU :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thanks for stop by and read the poem. i love the life and keep struggling cause life worth livingread morethanks for stop by and read the poem. i love the life and keep struggling cause life worth living
I like your vision of a positive life, overcoming the struggles it throws down in your way.
Your structure feels natural, with a healthy rhythm. Be careful about the grammar here: make your verbs parallel ("pass by and try to greet") and some of your rhyme seems forced ("missed and hesitated" where "hesitated" would better read "hesitation."
These are my suggestion, but of course this is your work. So, the decisions you make have to be your own. I like your positivity.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
thank you for the correction and suggestion. it mean a lot
simply person that like to write from the things i see according to my notes from travelling and research, try to convey things that capture by eyes, camera or feel by sense. for me poem is more than .. more..