Secrets

Secrets

A Poem by papaed
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Internal dialogue is often best expressed.

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They chose a gravel bar,

the one where they first made love.

It was good then.

But that’s a secret.


He faces away from the smiles.

A log is floating slowly by.

He hates his bow-tie.

But that is a secret.


The water keeps flowing.

He feels he’s flailing, 

a drowning man in a river of confusion.

But that’s a secret.


His level of commitment oscillates.

Being unwed is not so bad.

He begins to wonder if he could just run.

But that’s a secret.


The small crowd sings a hymn poorly.

He focuses on two butterflies.

The preacher drones.

He’ll keep his secrets.

© 2010 papaed


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This is so cool. I really enjoyed this poem, the repeating lines, the theme, everything :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ah the secrets we all keep. I love this poem==especially the last stanza===thinking of butterflies while the preacher drones.. hmmm.. seems to me maybe the butterflies' message from God was better one eh? :-) Keep up the good work

Posted 13 Years Ago


My Dear Papaed,

You would never know that this is a poem for a contest. This is done in a masterful fashion. I congratulate you. You have made this so poingiant. Going through with the marriage, keeping his secrets. We all go through life keeping secrets. (Why am I trying to explain this to you!!???)

Very best regards on an excellent write. Very high marks!

Rick

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wonderful submission to Tovl's "Ten". I loved the "secret theme" running through it. An intriguing and well penned poem. ~ Helena

Posted 14 Years Ago


I really like this, especially the repeated last line of each stanza and the slight variation to it in the last. Really gives the piece a definite feel that conveys very well. Clever use of the words; they fit so smoothly.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

loved this, really nice. tovli

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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papaed

Kansas City, MO



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no erudite pontifications, no complex extrapolations no intentional hurtful lies, just simple age-wise aliteration and prose, of a man who's in the throes of living day to day from his head down to.. more..

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