THE GOLDFISH WORLD

behold the mysterious goldfish

Golden ornament in a weightless world

grows dizzy when the water’s twirled.

Unaware of time or date.

Without appointments you can’t be late.

I wonder if you tend to drool

when you dream of swimming in a school.

I try to read your moving lips,

and wonder when your head dips.

Are you nodding affirmative,

or simply being assertive.

When your mouth forms that little ‘O’

are you laughing or exclaiming “Whoa!”?

Too bad fish language is so hard.

You might be a famous bard,

Judged by fish professor panels,

listed in fish history annals.

Safe and sound, your needs are met.

Without a care that your world is wet.

But, are you a lofty cogitator?

In your world a fierce debater?

Maybe studying for hours

the world beyond your powers

through glass slightly distorted

could be more than is purported.

Do you watch Fox or CNN

A&E or ESPN?

You seem to take everything in stride

So is it HGTV you abide? 

On what issues do you cogitate?

Effects of the rising cost of freight,

as it impacts the price of fish food,

or are you just a casual dude.

Is that suddenly released bubble

laughter or gastric trouble?

Does philosophy concern you?

Does metaphysics leave you blue?

When your bowl is being cleaned,

and from water you are weaned,

do you appeal to goldfish gods?

or calculate survival odds?

I want to think you accept with grace

what fate delivers in your place.

With zen-like calm you face the day

But deep inside you dream of play.

Reviews

[Beccy]

The sometimes, long and often disappointing task of scrolling through the many, many hundred, (if not thousands,) back pages of Writer's cafe, is rewarded when one comes across such a gem as this.

I love the way you muse about the little goldfish, how you give it a life beyond that enclosed glass bowl of a world. I cannot be that they simply go endlessly round day on day without care or thought.

'Deep inside you dream of play.' So true, and because of this, I cannot abide the capturing of even the smallest of God's creatures.

Beccy.

[C. Porter]

I love it!! Oh my gosh!! Great poem, I won't look at goldfish the same way again!! (And I thought my own poem changed my perspective on goldfish..sheeshh...you're so awesome) I really love it. Kudos!! THANKS FOR SHARING!!

And isn't the goldfish group fun??

[imawriter]

I'd like to choose a favorite stanza.. but the whole poem is great. It reminded me of the goldfish I once had. On the other hand, that last stanza......
I want to think you accept with grace
what fate delivers in your place.
With zen-like calm you face the day
But deep inside you dream of play.
Kinda reminds me of how I feel some days right before I start to work.. sigh..

Just one teeny tiny thing that you may want to edit....
"To bad fish language is so hard."

'to' should be 'too'

[Tovli]

nice. reads like a meditation; awesome flow and the rythme beckons the reader. tovli

[Bud]

A wonderful ponder over the life of a goldfish! Excellent work!

[Stacey Watts]

This was a fun little piece. I enjoyed reading it the rhyme was superb. Goldfish as complex creatures who would have known. I will never look at those swimmers the same without wondering.

[James Paulin]

Having fun with poetry a priority we both share. This light hearted poem was entertaining and made me smile!
Thank you for the joy write!

[Lauren Marie]

This was such a cute little poem.
"Golden ornament in a weightless world" That line is beautiful.
The other day I wished I coult be a house cat, and not have to worry about anything, and now I imagined myself as the goldfish.
Haha, great job!
~Lauren

[Rainbow Rider]

I had to click on this because of the title. I love this, and it would be perfect for my Group, 'Everything Goldfish'. I could see the ole fish swimming around, pondering all those thoughts. You think he ever wonders when the contractor is coming back to finish the inside of his castle?

If you are so inclined, post this up at the group. It would be a great asset, not to mention the first one there too. I guess just like my contests, I tend to go for the weird in my groups too.