I Will Stand Alone

answer to a paradise challenge

In the end I will stand alone

in an ocean of past experience 

it will seem unending and require perseverance

revealing my silver dreams and wanton wishes

my unfulfilled schemes, imagined delicious

 

In the end I will stand alone

my wanton spirit will create a world

where my memories will begin to swirl

and all of the things that bring me love

will be captured by the moon above

 

In the end I will stand alone

the light that guided me through this life

will house the memories of my wife

the windblown trees I so adore

will draw me to a new birth shore

 

In the end I will stand alone

from this world flows milk and honey

and there is no need for money

no far off vistas of things unsaid 

no pressure for things I’d dread

 

In the end I will stand alone

with only the power of my will

to bring me whatever thrills

and my spirit will sail on the wind of time

and I’ll no longer need to rhyme

Reviews

[Karen Ingram]

I might be wrong... but I see this as a poem about a man who is preparing to die. He looks forward to "a new birth shore" (afterlife) and being in a world of "milk and honey" where there is "no need for money" and "no pressure for things I'd dread". It sounds like he's looking forward to this new journey, but it's bittersweet because "the light that guided me through life will house the memories of my wife" tells me that his wife is not with him because she is either still alive or some place else. She is only memories to him, and that is sad. Beautiful but sad.

[Constance]

Beautiful poem. And it's true. All in all, we do stand alone at the end, and really, we always do. We can have a companion to help us along the way, but when it comes right down to it, it's us against life and its whims. We choose whether we simply ride it, or drive it where we want it to go. Sometimes, our steering gets a little bit off. :)
Well said. I enjoy your work.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This makes my heart feel bittersweet.. it is a beautiful poem .. i love the way you describe it , your way and the ending sentence is clever.. truly enjoyed it ..
Chloe
xoxo

[Kara Emily Krantz]

ha, love the ending. so abrupt, so... unrhyming. :) awesome, well done

"In the end I will stand alone

my wanton spirit will create a world"

that was my favorite part. and i really liked the repetition- you really made it work so well for the piece.

lovely job. made me think... and brought up many different emotions.

hugs

[Sparrow]

This leaves me with a lot to think about, thanks for the read :)

[Bubo]

Beautifully penned........the repetition works well, in the end we will stand alone, and only the real and
very simple things will matter.

In the end I will stand alone

from this world flows milk and honey

and there is no need for money

no far off vistas of things unsaid

no pressure for things I'd dread

To think that in 50 times none of the things we worry about will matter, so why worry now I ask myself,
just try to enjoy and bring joy into life..............thats what counts.

[Prose-full]

i like your style...nice write..