vision

radiance

in the sway of words

falling from bright wings

music and dance

in the play of leaves

across a sky of climbing blue

the glory of sweet life

echoing ave maria

from canyon walls

and you

standing in the summer sun

within my portion of forever

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your writing stirs the heart of this reader. I especially loved your closing verse, Ed!

[Ed Hart]

stirred, but not shaken...thank you

[writing mojo]

This is absolutely beautiful! I love the imagery and the spacing in your measures!

[Ed Hart]

thank you for the appreciation

[Carolynn]

This is very beautiful and romantic - what a lucky lady :)

[Ed Hart]

she had everything when she arrived, and then taught it to me, lucky man...thank you for stopping by Carolynn

[Donald Meikle]

I planned on writing one for the wife today
You're in my brain again.

[Ed Hart]

looks fresh and clean in here, well cared for

[Donald Meikle]

Get your eyes checked for cob (spider) webs

[...]

It's a stunner Ed, and I'm keeping it :)

[Ed Hart]

thank you lynn, think of it as a mirror

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Ed, everything you were, has brought you to who you are...and it's all good, my precious friend (you)

[Ken Simm.]

I think this is one of the best I've ever read. Anywhere.

[Ed Hart]

i just finished reading your just posted sister poem, and was fixing to jot a few words, when i glanced up and saw i had a review, and i wondered...and yes, it's you...and now you know how i feel about yours...

[Barbara Walker]

Stunning. You know what's important. And no wasted words. Pleasure to read.

[Ed Hart]

thank you for taking a look Barbara

[John]

My first reading of the last line had ‘forever’ rising in a trajectory with the ‘paradise’ of Kubla Khan, but I think the effect is meant to be less romantically sublime. For one thing, we’re not soaring but standing. While the verb in the previous three stanzas denoted movement, the verb in the final stanza describes a stationary figure, the inspiration for the vision. The alliteration in the penultimate line and the internal rhyme of sun, within, and portion further contribute to the creation of a static scene.

Like infinity and beyond, portion and forever seem at first something of an incongruous pairing. Together they are suggestive of both eternal life and eternal love with, I would suggest, a touch of Metaphysical wit. Maybe this is an entirely personal reading, but I think this is a poem dedicated as much to language (the sway of words) as to any beautiful Bea bathing in the summer sun.

[Ed Hart]

you have such a large and literate perspective...it is interesting for me to nod at what you say, and see what is so obvious revealed, and yet constructed by a part of me that knows more than i do...thank you John

[Relic]

I see this as four examples of the beauty of earth. The last being a love that encapsulates it all. Great poem Ed.

[Ed Hart]

i've always smiled at your precision and vision

[wolfshrew]

I've been warmed by reading this in a cold winter.

[Ed Hart]

thank you for your kind words