These are all beautiful love poems. I like how the first one reaches out at the center, grasping. Perhaps using the first two line of your first poem you could try this format for another poem:
Down paths that we share,
great wonders will stir.
Now the list all the wonders using rhyming couplets.
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Thank you so much Aethreal for taking the time to stop by and comment.
1. As a suggestion, I would put each poem into a separate writing so the audience can focus one at a time.
LOVE POEM OF FOCUS
1. Rictameter : To Love.
Vocabulary I Love:
1. Rictameter: I love the lyrical voice that is hidden in the poetry as we read it out loud.
2. A golden gift: This is an interesting color choice. Red is often what it is often chosen for love. However, I like how you replaced the generic color. Well done!
Subjectively, a "golden gift" means precious.
Why golden?
3. Paradise: I love the reference to paradise. It is beauty. It is love. It is not religion. It is spiritual.
Well done yet again!
CONCLUSION
1. The rest of the poetry was just as beautiful. However, I would have dissected it piece by piece if each was separate. The format is an original idea. I am just unsure if I like it, to be honest.
2. The pictures are wonderful! They compliment the poetry well.
3. What made you choose this format?
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Oh thank you so much for this indepth advice comment;it is so appreciated and I shall most certainly.. read moreOh thank you so much for this indepth advice comment;it is so appreciated and I shall most certainly take it on board. I think there was a particular reason why I chose this format .I had a new camera as a pressie and have realised I love photography also and simply got onto the habit of formatting in this way.However I am now taking your advice on board and again thank you so mcuh .I am really enjoying myself on here and wish you a great day also.
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You are very welcome:D I am happy that my advice helped! Photography is beauty; it captures realis.. read moreYou are very welcome:D I am happy that my advice helped! Photography is beauty; it captures realism.
Beautiful poetry. Thank you for brightening my gloomy Tuesday morning Eddy. :)
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You are so very welcome 'writing by' KS and I look forward to reading your work also.
Your com.. read moreYou are so very welcome 'writing by' KS and I look forward to reading your work also.
Your comment so appreciated and enjoy your day.
Eddy.
i am so pleased to meet someone else who enjoys writing in form Eddy, it isn't overly popular on this site so you get a big thumbs up from me..your poetry is delightful..
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Oh thank you so much Stella and looking forward to reading your poetry too.
Eddy.
They are all beautiful heartwarming poems. Wonderful works
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Thank you so very much The Girl That Let You Go and here's to so many more for us both to share on h.. read moreThank you so very much The Girl That Let You Go and here's to so many more for us both to share on here.
Eddy.
Thank you so very much lisat and here's to many many more for us both to share on here.
Havea .. read moreThank you so very much lisat and here's to many many more for us both to share on here.
Havea wonderful day.
You cover so much ground here in what is a vast subject, it becomes a little too much if you don't mind me saying so. I feel that publishing seperately would heighten the impact of these real gems to love.
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And welcome to WC. I'm sure you will enjoy.
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Thank you so much Ken and your advice taken on board greatly appreciated.
These are all beautiful love poems. I like how the first one reaches out at the center, grasping. Perhaps using the first two line of your first poem you could try this format for another poem:
Down paths that we share,
great wonders will stir.
Now the list all the wonders using rhyming couplets.
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Thank you so much Aethreal for taking the time to stop by and comment.
I read the pieces as spellbound.
They are so magical and enjoyable!
You may love to post each piece separately.
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Thank you so much zainul and thanks for your advice which I will take on board. This is only my firs.. read moreThank you so much zainul and thanks for your advice which I will take on board. This is only my first whole day on here and I am enjoying myself immensely.
Looking forward to reading many more of yours also.
Enjoy your day.
Eddy.
This is a good day for the writers of WC too.
They have found a new writer who is talented and.. read moreThis is a good day for the writers of WC too.
They have found a new writer who is talented and blessed with many virtues.
Enjoy your time with the wonderful community of writers :)
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Oh thank you so much zainul ;your comment so appreciated and thank you also for making me feel so we.. read moreOh thank you so much zainul ;your comment so appreciated and thank you also for making me feel so welcomed.
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