Cascading.

From a distance the echo of my duvet befalls my ears

But it's undesirable next to the thing that nears

Something so stong it can destroy my days

Yet let me feel joy in a plethora of ways

So I ignore my bed for this feeling

An emotion that has me reeling

Staggered by it's strength

Not sure I can go on

I really must say

This love is..

Strong.

xx

!

Reviews

[Sukriti Suki]

Nice. I would suggest removing the last xx and the exclamation mark...takes off the attention from the poem and the format.

[just take a breath]

i like the format and it all flows well :) but i think it all could have morphed into the last word a little better.... like, your entire poem has a pretty steady rhyme scheme and then it just ends with "strong" and that doesn't rhyme with anything that was before it... other than that i really like it! :)

[Cheryl J. Turner]

Did you sculpt this too look so fabulous?! It's flows really well! Especially considering the format you've followed, I like it!