Tiny Hummingbird

A poem about valuing the little things in life.

I look out my window

Hoping to catch sight of you

Morning sunlight finds its way to my front porch

Bugs crawl around hunting for food

I pray that you will too

 

My hand cups my chin

Anticipation mounts as I wait

Hours tick by slowly, still I don’t turn away

I just know you will grant my wish

I will stay all day if I must

 

You fly in swiftly

Tiny wings flitting furiously

In stationary flight, you drink my crimson gift

Turning my way as if to say thank you

Prior to ducking away

 

Until tomorrow, tiny hummingbird

Reviews

[CookieDough]

I see the pictures in my head, when I read it, good work!

[lee von cleef]

Can't help thinking of a humming bird hitching a ride under a goose wing.And they do look at you when you think about them.

[Scott Mou]

The level of discription is profound

[easybreezy]

Thank you!

[Pankaj Lohia]

its funny how you describe yourself an ametuer writer and write something so beautiful. its really nice :)

[easybreezy]

Your comment means a lot to me, especially coming from a gifted poet like yourself! :)

[Pankaj Lohia]

haha.. no i am not a gifted poet.. i am just learning.. an ameteur like you :) you write well.

[zach h.]

I just read about how you couldn't use the letter 'e', that is TOTALLY awesome! Even before I read about that, I thought this poem was really good. I like how the poem doesn't really reveal what you are searching for in the first two stanzas, only at the end do we know (if we hadn't read the title:) ). There are some good visuals in this as well. Good job!

[easybreezy]

Thank you! I had fun with this one.

[The Analog Kid]

I like the way you personified the hummingbird. Nice job:)

[easybreezy]

Thank you. I don't normally write poems, but I couldn't resist a contest where you couldn't use the letter "e". I like how it turned out!

[The Analog Kid]

Yeah real good. That's a cool challenge!

[Dee Okolotowicz]

I like this poem very well. My mother has a hummingbird feeder in her yard, and your poem reminded me of many days when I would be on her porch watching the little beauties floating around, drinking that colorful liquid.

[RachelReaper]

awwww!!!!! hummingbirds!!!! this poem was sweet, cute, and pretty. It reminded me of summertime.

[easybreezy]

Thank you! I wrote this for a contest where you couldn't use the letter "e".