Tiny Hummingbird

A poem about valuing the little things in life.

I look out my window

Hoping to catch sight of you

Morning sunlight finds its way to my front porch

Bugs crawl around hunting for food

I pray that you will too

 

My hand cups my chin

Anticipation mounts as I wait

Hours tick by slowly, still I don’t turn away

I just know you will grant my wish

I will stay all day if I must

 

You fly in swiftly

Tiny wings flitting furiously

In stationary flight, you drink my crimson gift

Turning my way as if to say thank you

Prior to ducking away

 

Until tomorrow, tiny hummingbird

Reviews

[Elwyn]

Nature is truly astounding, isn't it? I am particularly fond of the shape of this poem, was that intentional? I also liked that this was addressed to the hummingbird itself, rather than being about the hummingbird. Very unique perspective that I enjoyed reading.

[easybreezy]

Thank you! The structure was intentional for aesthetic value. Also, this poem was written without a single letter "e". Harder to do than you would think, so I'm glad it appeals to you.

[Bare Trees]

A special moment shared. This is a delightful read I enjoyed. Great poem from you easybreezy.

[easybreezy]

Thank you! Enjoy the little moments in life. The world would be a much better place if everyone stopped to appreciate things once in a while.

[Bare Trees]

I agree and in fact adhere all the time to your view. You're welcome.

[Lemunculus]

I love this poem soooo muuuuccchhhhh

[Saumya]

this is soooooooooooooooooooooo beautiful....!!!!!!
loved it...!!1
with best wishes,
saumya

[Sami Khalil]

"You fly in swiftly

Tiny wings flitting furiously

In stationary flight, you"
A very good write on this magnificent bird...:)

[James]

What a pleasant read. I really enjoyed it. Great poem.

[A. H. Pinley]

Probably one of my favorite birds. Nice write!

[easybreezy]

Thank you!

[Luke L]

Lovely! Just marvelous!

[easybreezy]

Thank you! Your opinion means so much to me.

[Luke L]

no problem keep up the good work

[zainul]

3*5+1=16 lines piece with 3 diamond like stanzas and 1 straight line glorified the dream bird.Your challenge to participate a poem writing contest where 'e' could not be used
was an awesome decision.
The beauty of your piece is enviable.
Congratulations!!!

[easybreezy]

Thank you for your kind review. I believe that a visually beautiful structure is as important the words that are written.

[zainul]

You have considered all aspects of aesthetics,poetics and meaning perfectly
while presenting a lovely piece to your readers.
May I know what was the result of the contest?

[easybreezy]

First place. Though there weren't very many entries.

[zainul]

Congratulations,dear friend for that achievement!!!