Why Love?

First poem. =/

People are always striving for love

Love is an emotion which isn't quite earned

Children are unknowingly comforted by it's embrace

Once it's gone, it can't always be returned

And for most people it is an endless race

It is felt by some from a god above

Others can't describe it, it is something they feel

It is treacherous, but it can also be as pure as a dove

But for me... I only wish that it could be real

It shatters worlds, It breaks hearts

It makes us stumble and fall

But for a lucky few it lands like a dart...

We know what love is, but why is it felt at all?

...

I can't answer that. I can't do that math

All I know is that It's an adventure in which we all partake

I'm on mine now and I must have forgotten the map

I see her, I just can't find the path.

 

Author's Note

Please give constructive criticism. As you may know, I lack confidence.

Reviews

[Devons]

This is really skillful, neat and has a lovely flowing rhyming scheme that works right down to practically every syllable. The subject of the poem might not be new (obviously, it's love!) but the way in which the sentiment is conveyed, and the tender longing that comes with it is beautifully put across. Good work.

[Dylan]

I never really thought about incorporating rhythm into my poetry. I'll keep that in mind next time. =)

[Mason]

For a first, this is very good. I has a nice flow to it. I, personally, like to have a nice rhythm in mine--probably, because I'm a musician--, but I still wouldn't change any part of this poem.