Reasons

Lucky I am, to call you mine

These are the reasons why

I remember, the moment I met you

My heart was already set on you

Looked into those brown eyes

And I was forever lost

Oh how could I ever forget those eyes

Rich and soft like chocolate

That have a beautiful shine in the light

I remember, the moment I kissed you

When you put your lips on mine

The feeling was something indescribable

But oh so desirable

The Sparks that lit up my heart for you

Were just the beginning of this startling love affair

My heart now melts for you,

Your lips slightly parted

Your smile is infectious

That laugh of yours is contagious 

And let’s not forget about those cute animated facial expressions 

This is all pushing me deeper and deeper into the fiery abyss of love 

Being around you, makes my heart skip a beat

The lust, the passion, the heat

Being with you will always be like a calming, colorful dream

I've found you and you found me

Lucky I am, to call you mine

I could go on and on, but for now 

Those are the reasons why

Author's Note

Hey guys, thank you for taking the time to read this, I would appreciate any feedback I can get, this is the first time I've ever posted any of my writing, so I'd love to hear back from you!

Thank you in advance.
-Dylan Kerr

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I don't really understand why such a beautiful poem has no reviews. Shame on you people SHAME ON YOU!
I will take my time to review this because it deserves a review.
I loved this poem, it was written straight from your heart, and that's where the best writing comes from.
What a beautiful, romantic, sweet and lovely write this was.
I hope you have read this to the woman you wrote this for, bet if you have she loved it.
Wonderful poem, there was a few great rhymes but I feel it didn't rhyme throughout the whole poem.
Maybe next time don't rhyme at all or rhyme through the whole poem.
Half rhyming and half of the poem not rhyming is not the best way to go.
Overall I really did love this poem.
Keep writing :)

[Dylan Kerr]

Thank you SO MUCH for your kind words Cimmy! I did read this to my girlfriend and she absolutely loved it, seeing her smile is one of my favorite things about her! I'll definitely keep in mind with what you said on rhyming though, this was my first poem so I'll surely be practicing to get better in my writing. Thanks again for this review! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

You are more then welcome :)
I thought she would have :)
I'm sure you will get better, I have noticed since I started writing to now there is a difference in my writing, I have gotten much better.
To bad my grammar has not :P

[barleygirl]

This is a beautifully written, playful, heartfelt description of how it might feel to be in the company of someone very special. Anyone in the world would love to be thought of this way. If you are describing a real person, then this is a job well done. If you are making this up, then I'm even more in awe. I like that your tone is a nice balance between everyday conversational language & also with a bit of elevated word crafting thrown in, here & there.

[Valentine]

Sounds like someone has it really bad. Valentine

[V]

I have the slight feeling this one reaches/goes a little deeper than the other one I have read which seems to be related in a way. Nice choices of words, again you just write down what you feel, what's on your mind and heart in this moment, I like this attitude.

So to give you a small advice since that's what you ask for in your profile description; read a lot of different poetry yet mainly the kind of poetry you're interested in and you want to write, as well (same goes for other literary pieces), a good writer is often also a good reader... You might get inspired to try out/dabble in various styles which gives you/ your writing experience..I think your writings could read a tad smoother, even more flowing when you try to maintain a similar length of lines...just flows more, but only my opinion.