Cut Open and Torn Apart

On the outside I seem okay.
On the inside it feels like I'm dead even though I'm alive.
By everyone that knows me.
Other days I feel like I am the happiest person on the planet.
I can call that a lie.

I am cut open and torn apart.
Your words can't help.
Your actions won't work.
It is all because I am cut open and torn apart.

Through all of the fake smiles.
All of the fake laughs.
I'm faking everything just to get away from you.
Not that I don't love you.
I really do it's just that I feel hurt on the inside.

I am cut open and torn apart.
Your words can't help.
Your actions won't work.
It is all because I am cut open and torn apart.

I don't know what I did.
I don't know how it happened.
The reason that I am hurt on the inside.
But I can say that I don't like it.

I am cut open and torn apart.
Your words can't help.
Your actions won't work.
It is all because I am cut open and torn apart.

Author's Note

I guess it is a song more than a poem, but oh well just tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Maria F. Rojas]

yeah, you can fool people thinking you are a happy person. Only person that knows for real is yourself and you have to deal with the feelings you have been through each day til you move on then there is nothing left to lie with yourself. Painful but not a bad song. Keep up. :)

[Dr.Who.LOVER]

Two words. LOVED IT!!!! Really amazing I could feel the power and sadness behind the words! Really really good!

[Ed Rector]

aw the dellerium of what seems to be heartbreak... it has created many good poems but this isn't one of the best but still has its points of interest...,

[deadly healer]

when i was reading it i was sensing that it was more of a song. at first the title was a bit misleading. i was thinking the poem would be totally different, but u made it work. i loved the twist. wasnt predictable like most poems tend to be. well done.
-deadly healer

[Sabbath_Nikole]

Nice use of that repition. Very articulate. Great write!

[NoAirToBreatheXSuffocat..]

its a woderful song and poem, girl!

[Manda]

awww this was so sad.... but it was still very good. nice job expressing your emotions! keep it up! write on!

[blob blob]

this is a wonderful write from the very first line-and
the first and last verses make this poem just superb...
God--how i can relate to this--really--great poetry...
a magnificent piece of expression--i love this!!!

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

i really like this poem :) I think it would make a great song too! :) :)

[J.M]

This is a very effective poem/song - I also understand exactly what you mean about fake smiles and alternating between reasonably happy and really depressed. nice work, well done.

[Poisoned Melody]

Beautifully written. Alot of people could relate to this feeling. I know i can.
Thanks for posting(: