I'm Tired

This is dedicated to someone that really hurt me. And if you know me well you do know who it is.

I'm tired,
Of you pretending.
I'm tired,
Of you lying.
I'm tired,
Of you saying what you wanted to say.
I'm tired,
Of the pain you cause.
I'm tired,
Of you breaking my heart into pieces.
I'm tired,
Of all of this crap.
Jump off a bridge if you have to.
You aren't worth it anymore.
I'm tired of you hurting me.
Maybe you should get out of my life.
I wish I could slit your throat and call it even.
I'm tired of this pain.
I'm tired of this lie you keep putting me on.
Why would you do that?
To protect your own hide or mine?
I'm tired of your face.
It's ugly and disgusting to me now.
I'm tired of all of your crap.
I will throw you off the Brooklyn Bridge.
I will make you hit your face on a locker.
Or something harder to make you bleed.
This is for you little dweeb.
Now get out of my life because I'm tired of you. 

Author's Note

Dedicated to one person I trusted most. Then he had to rip my heart out of my chest. My favorite line of this is I wish I could slit your throat and call it even.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Wow, a really powerful write! Your emotions came through so strongly in this piece, and I really felt the anger and frustration behind your words. There was certainly a sense of pain and heartache in your poem, and I thought that you did a great job in expressing this in the beginning, particularly with the repetition of the line 'I'm tired,'. Great write!
~PaperHearts

[JenLyn]

I had a very good friendship end over a year or so ago and I'm still not over it, I know where you're coming from and I can really relate to this piece because of the situation I was in.

I really like the beginning and the way it was formatted, I wish you would have continued that throughout the rest of the poem, it flowed better than the ending of the poem. Also I think that the line that reads "I'm tired, of you breaking my heart into pieces" would sound better is it just said "I'm tired, of you breaking my heart."

Also the line that says "Maybe you should get out of my life" should maybe say "You're out of my life or I want you out of my life or you're no longer in my life or you're no longer running my life." I just gave you a few examples of that line because the poem is about you being tired of this person and no longer wanting them around and by using the word "maybe" it's like you don't know whether or not you want them to stay or go.

There was a lot of emotion in this piece, and I can definitely feel the anger behind some words like "I wish I could slit your throat and call it even." If that doesn't scream hate then I don't know what does?

Keep writing. :)

[HorrorMaster]

aww i understand how you feel.

[Kaelyn Shea]

great job i like it alot

[Frantzuu]

This is great as always, let's talk about this piece.
There's a lot of strong emotions engraved into your words, it's obvious that you've put heart and soul into writing it, and the pain is also felt in this piece. Great work, I like it!!!!