Sad and Alone

A poem I wrote for school. I was in ninth grade. I only wrote this because my Uncle's anniversary was coming up...

Deep in the darkness in my heart,

There is a monster that dwells inside me,

The leaves blow as I pass,

Through the woods you go,

But no one knows you're crying,

You feel the rain fall upon your head,

Again you say this is the worst,

People crowd around as you fall,

You fall into an abyss,

You catch yourself and then you feel alone,

Your love ones can't help because you're going to hurt,

You think the world is ending,

You break down in tears,

Then you know your heart has stopped,

You die at the end when no one knows what it means to be sad or alone.

Author's Note

Just know that I only write poetry when I'm sad.

Reviews

[Geel]

if no ones knows what it is to be depressed sad and alone they are not true to themselves...ur words are heard...and u are so worthy to be loved...know that u are loved and through ur writing healing will come about change will surface...breathe and live...it ok to cry then wipe ur eyes and stand then fly

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

i love this poem it was full of emotion...and no one can say i know what your going through in less they have gone through it too...beautiful piece (love the title )

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Deep, emotional, great write:)

[Escape My Fate]

Great Job. I love it. Such deep emotion and pain. Keep writing poems, your amazing at it.

[Ashley.M.E]

this is good

[Kat Plunkett]

good write :)

[Dutch Jr.]

I feel your poetry goes deep. Good job at setting a morbid mood, and making the reader feel yur emotion.

[SamBug]

Wow, this was very sad. I felt all of the emotions swirling inside of me, which is definitely a good thing. You did very good capturing all of the feelings in this short piece. Great job!

[Eidolon Michael]

Aw, this was a sad one. Nonetheless, it was very nice :-)

[Levioshock]

awwwwwwwwwww

[AJChallenger]

Interesting, but the way it's written you stop after every line. I don't feel like that's what you intend to happen. In poetry commas are used to mean a pause. Periods a full stop. Only use them if you intend for that to happen.