Chapter 1

First chapter.

This is probably the crappiest story I have ever read. I don’t know how I finished it, but I wanted to do some commentary because it seems fun! I hope you enjoy my commentary.

             Chapter 1.

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) (No, I don’t want too.)  2 my gf (ew not in that way) (Was just thinking she was your friend…not that I care about you or her.) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. (Great beta reading right here. You deserve a medal, Raven…) U rok! Justin (Why would he want to date you anyway?) ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX! (I do have to say My Chemical Romance is great, but this story just makes me lose respect for them. I’m sorry.)

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Hi my name is Ebony Dark’ness Dementia Raven Way (Totally would want that as my name…not.) and I have long ebony black hair (that’s how I got my name)(Don’t care) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears (Cause that is possible…) and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (Yeah, right.) (AN: if u don’t know who she is get da hell out of here!).(Yeah, I think most people know who she is.) I’m not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he’s a major f*****g hottie. (Incest much? Kinda disturbing if you ask me.) I’m a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I’m also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England (Great not knowing where Hogwarts is. Even I know where it is and I have not completed all of Harry Potter. Dummy.) where I’m in the seventh year (I’m seventeen) (Duh). I’m a goth (in case you couldn’t tell) (I think at this point everyone knows that by now. Not that we care.) and I wear mostly black. (Not all “goffic” people wear that.) I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. (I got to say I love Hot Topic too, but Hot Topic isn’t just for goth people. Plus they have things that everyone enjoys, but I guess Tara doesn’t know that.) For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. (Don’t really care, but okay.) I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining (I love the magical weather, but that would be considered sleet.) so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. (Such a lovely person isn’t she?)

“Hey Ebony!” shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! (Yeah don’t need that dramatic pause right there. It’s not that dramatic.)

“What’s up Draco?” I asked.

“Nothing.” he said shyly.

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. (What great interaction between characters…)

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AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! (Tara, it is terrible, but so laughable that I had to enjoy it.)

Author's Note

Just having fun. Hope you do too.

Reviews

[Moonie]

OH MY GAWD!!!!! I CAN'T STOP LAUGHING(Or using capitals, I suppose).....,:D

[Bluefire]

This made me laugh SO hard XDDD
I like the commentary, it just makes it that much funnier!
Well done!

[Angie Diane♥♥]

Lol thank you for the review. XD
This fanfiction is so terrible....
My brain cells were starting to die so I had to stop for a while.

[Bluefire]

I don't think it's terrible at all. I think it's deathly funny. xD