OUTWORLD - Savagery Of The Enkhares

With a loud change of gears, the hover-disc pulls Peeraak away into the shadows. Sashra convulses hard against her bonds looking down into the abyss below. Falling would mean instant death.

OUTWORLD     Want to read this in a different language ? Change the TO field to your own country and click the TRANSLATE button after going HERE O U T W O R L D Savagery Of The Enkhares (one very tripped out dream I had) © July 2013 Written by David Wicker (Please do not reprint without permission)   Several million years ago, the dinosaurs did indeed die off as they were expected and mankind did survive, but in this spectrum, another breed of life also survived that did not make its way into realization until the year 2043, a rare lifeform based upon the genetic structure of lizards and dinosaurs yet bipeds walking on two feet and intelligence far keener and stronger than their human counterparts. Amusement of the Enkhares took form in severe genetic experimentation reaching far and vast into insanity and its many tangible forms of reality.  Death was no longer to be feared, as it occurred quickly and suddenly for the slightest opposition against the Enkhares as all were instantly reborn into a new creature genetically enhanced to be more docile than its counterpart. It is in this that the Enkhares succeeded mankind for all of its weapons, the genetic decimation was the ultimate and final device of destruction. No more music, stories, movies, and in some states communication, injections were given several a day to the humans to stimulate the brain to perceive these forms of entertainment, yet most if not all of these injections carried a brain-deadening agent that allowed the Enkhares further control over an already pacified and suppressed race, the humans. * * * Subject for exhibit: Sashra, scheduled for termination as she has not blended in well with this new life, having been frozen in cryogenetic sleep back in 1994.  She alone survived from the holocaust that all that wiped mankind off the earth.  She alone remembers what life was like before the Enkhares took over.  When the Enkhares finally did open up her sleep-capsule they never expected such a barrage of rebellious attitude.  Instead of quelling it like hundreds before her, they enveloped it to study and learn from what they could. Peeraak, one of the Transitioners in the human fold, his duty being to brainwash with clever thought and manipulation what drugs and injections could not reach into the brain was having another long talk with Sashra. Sashra: "But don't you see, it's wrong to constantly inflict pain, for the mere fact that if used in quantity, it no longer holds any strength for manipulation.  If you're going to damn us, damn us in a more pleasurable way.  There was human pleasure years ago, I remember that.  For us to constantly die and be reborn days later to have shattered memories of what we were is the ultimate hell on earth." Peeraak: "There is wisdom in what you speak little one, but why should we go out of our way to develop a pleasure-drug since the erradication of your species has shown surprising and flawless results by touching off certain impulses in the brain to effect horror, sorrow, and death." Sashra: (pulling against the bonds that hold her several meters off the ground) "Because by doing this, we may hold a little less anger towards you, by doing this, you may find some willing to conduct some of your further horror experiments with the promise of this pleasure drug.  GODDAMNIT !  We don't have anything except drugs for stupid music now !  It didn't used to be that way !" Peeraak: "Pah!" (and it coils its long tongue out at Sashra being levitated by a thin round obelisque, its size better than double of Sashra's) "The drug works, it is a rough magic, but humans say they do hear very active music in their brains after once being injected. I believe our most popular one to date is called "Karate Like You Like It ... " (Peeraak's long talons flicker across several air-hypo-drugs, the liquid inside each gleaming with an inner glow of years of experimentation, Peeraak's lizard eyes focus keenly on Sashra until she flinches under his unwavering gaze) He continues: "So much amusement have you brought us little one.  We will consider what you have said.  Until then, you are granted a rest period of 2 hours upon which you will be released into our medical zone once again." With a loud change of gears, the hover-disc pulls Peeraak away into the shadows. Sashra convulses hard against the bonds looking down into the abyss below. If she were to fall it would mean instant death, but that again, is merely a transitory state to the Enkhares. [[ alarm went off ]] Dream ends. Return back HOME   You are Earth Visitor #

Author's Note

Questions, comments, compliments, or kerosene, take your pick and lemme know what ya think ! :)

Reviews

[Wolven]

This is quite trange to me. Your writing style is well developed, but something about the story seems kind of odd. The beginning bit feels like its the opening to something like Star Wars, you know, with the text sort of moving away into the distance. That same sortof narrative style seems to have been incorporated here. It's strange, but good.
The second half i found even stranger. You've written it something like a play, with regards to the dialogue.
I would recommend a bit of development of characters. Sashra for instance, you did the background thing, that she's been in Cryo since 1994 and is the only one who knows what life was like before the 'Enkhares' came. There are certain inconsistencies though (if you could call it that) as in we don't know what age she is (or was, before she went into cryo'). I get the feeling she's meant to be a teenager given the implications of 'such a barrage of rebellious attitude.' (Thats a great line actually) yet her speech seems a bit too inteligent for a teenager to have, it sounds almost robotic. eg "...it's wrong to constantly inflict pain, for the mere fact that if used in quantity, it no longer holds any strength for manipulation..." i dunno if anyone else got that vibe but...
Anyways, this is an interesting story, and i feel like it could be branched out into something more. keep up the good work! :)

[dw817]

Umm ... It's just a dream. I can't go any further than what I had dreamed on it. I'm not a very good writer for things I haven't personally experienced. The dialogue was verbally spoken to me in my dream so I just wrote it down word for word.

And no, dreams aren't very consistent sometimes. I think you'll appreciate one of my more professional chapters, which I do plan to ultimately publish found HERE:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/dw817/1187931/

Glad you liked it tho. I have many dreams every night, I'm only just now trying to get some of them in a half-way reasonable writing order.

[Hatchling]

Amazing chapter! I can't wait for next one

[dw817]

Umm, no chapters here, Wonder Woman, just a random dream I had. I'll post more around October for Halloween.

[Mark]

there seems to be a large number of these type of stories. Humans being subjugated by a more sophisticated and/or stronger, smarter, superior-in-every-way type story.

I don't really like them. I prefer stories where we meet aliens on equal 'footing' so to speak.

Your work is very visual. More about what is going on rather than someone's thoughts. I like that.

[dw817]

Hi Mark, great to see ya ! Yeah every single dream I have plays out like a movie. When I stayed in bed and slept 14+ hours on some new meds I had, that's where the idea of Barrier came from, and yes, it came complete with scrolling movie credits at the end, along with another story I hadn't done anything with, weird, called, "Signed Myself" and - well, I'm not in it. Anyways.

Since then I always try to write my stuff like it's from a movie originally.

[Ellie EM]

...immas tell u's the truths: I don'ts gets this story. But yous still did a goods jobs writing it with the plot and characters and everythings!! ^^

[dw817]

You make a good point, Ellie. No, I don't get this story either. I mean I don't watch scary weird movies, I watch cartoons for the most part. Rose assured me once again today, it's the chemicals in my head, the meds I'm taking that cause such tripped out dreams.

Like the strange one I had this morning. Rose finally told me she thought the dialect I heard of the witches in the classroom was Scottish. I'm not sure - I just know I was really sad I couldn't take that Fairy Lipstick back with me to the real world to give her as a gift.

And I really think anyone can write well, they just have to - and I know you've heard this before - listen to your dreams. :)

[Ellie EM]

...okays? ^^

[dw817]

Our dreams keep our fountain pens overflowing. :D

[Ellie EM]

Haha u talks smarts! ^^ :D

[dw817]

Smart-a*s, wise fool, or idiot savant, take your choice. :7

[Ellie EM]

Ahhh...just smart :p I didn't mean anything rude

[dw817]

Nope, it's just me and no you're not being rude. I was called Poindexter growing up, and it seems the more I can poke fun at myself today, the stronger I can feel about my insecurities from the past. :)

[Ellie EM]

Ohh okays...lol :p

[KP Merriweather]

interesting dream. most of my stories comes from my dreams :) hey keep at it & you might dream up a bestseller

[dw817]

It seems dreams definitely fuel our imaginative writings. And - I am working on a novel (when I remember to). I don't think it will be a bestseller, but it will get published, and I'll be interested enough in that.

[KP Merriweather]

when you do publish it let me know. i will buy it seriously! i support all my artistic/creative friends

[dw817]

Well thanks, but - I'm gonna charge as little as possible for it. Apparently I =DO= have to charge some amount however for Amazon to consider it.

[KP Merriweather]

dood if it's reasonably priced i'll buy it. im not *that* cheap lolz hell my latest doorstopper is $16.99 & its 500 pgs. considering the norm for books that size (19.99 & higher) my book is fairly cheap

[dw817]

No, it's not that, I hate money, especially earning it. That's one reason I'm seeing a psychologist. Something skewed in my wires there. :)

[MandaBear]

This was a very interesting dream. I can say I never had a dream like this before. What a dream! Great job!

[dw817]

Thanks ! I know years ago I talked to my doctor about suppressing my dreams years ago, at MHMR, and he gave me a curious look and asked why. And I said well they're bothersome. He said they're incredible dreams. And I asked, even the nightmares ?

He laughed and said no, obviously, but that I should write down my dreams and that we can go over them. Well, today I have a different MHMR doctor - AND I MISSED my Monday appointment, bright snap early tomorrow I need to call them to reschedule and get some bloodwork done too.

Anyways, yes - so - when I have busy dreams I do wake up, go downstairs and write it down in notepad right then, save it, then go back to sleep. As it is I have 30-such mini-stories, some of which are VERY nightmarish and I'll save those for October, but the silly crazy ones I'll try to post in here over time ...

[MandaBear]

Wow. well I wish you nothing but good dreams from now on! Guess what? leave for Florida in 2 days!!

[dw817]

What are you going to do in Florida ?

[MandaBear]

Anything and everything I can do in 10 days

[dw817]

What's the big thing going to Florida - for you ? What is the main thing you are gonna do there ?read moreWhat's the big thing going to Florida - for you ? What is the main thing you are gonna do there ?

[MandaBear]

See my family. I have never been there before so I don't know what is there

[dw817]

How many family members do you plan to visit there - and how many are you taking to visit from where you are now ?

[MandaBear]

3 they all pretty much live about 2 hours from each other.

[dw817]

Is there anyone you are especially looking forward to seeing when you get there ? I visit my sister once a month out in the country. And - well - maybe we are still a little like brother and sister. Indifferent in some ways, and friends in others.

[MandaBear]

my one uncle I cant wait to see but otherwise I am there to take pictures!

[dw817]

Well when you get back you will most certainly have to post them ! As you know (or should) you can post an infinite # of photos in WC so don't hold back ! :7

[MandaBear]

Lol i think If I do that WC might blow up lol

[dw817]

Oh I don't think so. I've uploaded well over 100-pictures myself so far, I suspect there's room for more.

[MandaBear]

Lol knowing me it would be well over 100

[dw817]

Well doncha know if you took a hunnerd pictures, I would certainly look at all of 'em. :7

[MandaBear]

One time in about like 4 hours I took 500 pics for one trip

[dw817]

Well in THAT case you might consider a full-length motion picture movie ! J/K ! :D

[MandaBear]

Lol I could lol