Waterfall

Short inspirational poem...

Temporarily under edit.

Author's Note

Please point out anything you see.... Thanks :)

Reviews

[Dusty]

Thank you all for your kind comments.. by "Please point out anything you see." I meant errors or strange lines or such, I was not expecting such good feedback. Thank you all.. I will try to return the favor and review some of your writing, I apologize if it seems I have not helped others enough on here, my computer is 11 years old and therefore exceedingly slow.
I have actually never had a near-drowning experience... This poem is just inspired by alot of the troubles we all face in life..
Thank you all again... :)

[Sheila Kline]

Wonderful write of courage and determination to overcome obstacles and that which brings us down in life!!...and a write of FAITH in that which we see and that which remains unseen!!
Very well done, and thank you Mark for referring it to me!

[Ellen Hammond]

I have been sitting here amazed this was penned by someone so young and wondering if this was written from a near-drowning experience or if it is an outstanding metaphor. Either way, it is brilliantly inspired and inspiring.

[emmajoy]

I really want to re-read this, so, will return .. it's a fine piece of writing ..

[Kenny L. Mitchell]

I see a strong young woman who has a gift beyond her (obvious) years. Very good work. I will have to read more of your stuff. SWEET!

[Mark]

I see that this is a wonderful metaphor, for feeling swept away in the current of life events beyond your control;
I see a strong woman, with faith and confidence that will ever deliver her;
I see an inspirational young friend, with a limitless future.
Were these the sort of things you asked to have pointed out?
The only line I balked at was "tugged and tugged"; I might use different verbs, instead of two identical.

[Demmi]

i agree, very inspirational :) i can feel the struggle, the confusion and finally the accomplishment of getting past the seemingly impossible obstacle, very well writen! I like the emotion in it:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What do I see, well I see such a positive poem with true words of life's obstacles and a person who knows it takes a strong heart to climb over them. Beautiful and inspirational work.