Choking on hope.
A Poem by
dukovan
One foot in the "real world". One foot in the art world.
My right leg is a little shorter than my left.
Keep hope.
I'm in
the dark,
with a knife and
kaleidoscope.
Leave home.
You're in
my arms,
like bars
that squeeze
until you choke.
Go home.
A feather,
dipped
in ink,
just so
you know.
Lost hope.
Plucked
it out,
and fed
it to
my folks.
Don't go.
Nostalgia
spoke,
and froze
me to
our ghosts.
Lets go.
I write
about
my wings
and hope
I don't
choke.
© 2011 dukovan
Author's Note
you know... cause the right side of your brain is the artistic side.
Reviews
I like this a lot. Nice expression and great form.
Posted 13 Years Ago
This is so honest and pure. It really creates a very tender response from this reader. I love the second to last stanza "Dont go. Nostalgia spoke, and froze me to our ghosts." That's a very unique and profound line that speaks volumes. You have a simplicity that is very relatable....beautiful write...
Posted 13 Years Ago
This is so honest and pure. It really creates a very tender response from this reader. I love the second to last stanza "Dont go. Nostalgia spoke, and froze me to our ghosts." That's a very unique and profound line that speaks volumes. You have a simplicity that is very relatable....beautiful write...
I think you may find that writing about your wings will help keep you balanced in this crazy world. I like the way you have placed these complex questions into short phrases. Stepping out is always scary and is a process that continues as long as you live...at least if you are truly alive.
Posted 13 Years Ago
I think you may find that writing about your wings will help keep you balanced in this crazy world. I like the way you have placed these complex questions into short phrases. Stepping out is always scary and is a process that continues as long as you live...at least if you are truly alive.
Good write.......nicely expressed
Posted 13 Years Ago
Good write.......nicely expressed
just keep writing through these things. Hopefully the positive outcome of choking is a dislodging of obstructive material.... think about it.
Posted 13 Years Ago
just keep writing through these things. Hopefully the positive outcome of choking is a dislodging of obstructive material.... think about it.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
It took me until now to really know what that meant. I miss your reviews
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dukovan Oconomowoc, WI
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