Journaled off the page

This brain fog clears up..
But by then I'm ready for bed
My eyes are strained
From searching for cracks of light in the clouds
You can only keep this up so long
Before you have to look away
Back to the instrument panel
Blinking away the lack of discernment

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

That is so annoying to finally have a clear mind only to find you are ready for bed! And as for piloting blind and only by intstrumentation, that is an act both of skill and faith. That is how we also live our lives, searching and trusting. Thanks for sharing this wonderfully deep poem.

[roarke]

ah, brain fog, know it well. "From searching for cracks of light in the clouds" ... nailed it.

[Davidgeo]

"... cracks of light in the clouds"

I like that. That's good writing.

[barleygirl]

I was very attracted to your title, but I don't get much of a connection between that & your poem. This isn't bad or good. Just an observation. I find this to be inventive & original writing which piques lots of possibilities in the readers mind as one reads along. I started out reading the physicality of the message, how it physically would feel to be in this spot, but then it started to veer off in a more metaphysical way. This line: "You can only keep this up so long" -- that's where it popped away from the literal storyline & started me to thinking about how many dumbfucks I've put up with for so many years, even tho they bored me to tears, or they offended me, or whatever. People pleasing. Then one day you hit this point where you can't take another ounce of it. The ending of this poem reminds me of how I just can't stand to read the howling of negativity on social media, both sides, as the political conventions rage on. I have no curiosity to hear whatever bullshit is being shoveled out at either one. For me, & for many, there's only one person I'd vote for, for prez. So why subject myself to all this fomenting? This is very intelligent writing, but also just the right amount of vague so it can pique whatever's in the reader's mind or heart (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie