Acoustic.

Where do you think they go
when the exit signs fade off in the corners?
I hope we learn to share,
when your eyes flicker and I can only imagine.

I'll use someone else's phrase
but I trust we dream the same.

For now just watch the show.
You're my opposite, already turning the page.
You're quiet in the crowd
so for now don't blink while I try to write out-loud.

I trust you see the words.
I trust you feel them too.

Author's Note

its about seeing a movie, then thinking about it afterwards through the night, and then coming home and sort of relaying themes to my own life, and start thinking about my wife, and wonder what she's thinking feeling as I voice my critiques and opinions about the movie. Then wondering what she dreams about as I stare into my eyelids until I dose off...

Reviews

[trainwreck]

This was a great write. I think it could be a bit expanded, maybe a stanza or so longer, just so the theme and the "plot" could be a little clearer. Or even more hazy. Overall, I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sending me the request for this piece.

[Mia]

"I trust you see the words.
I trust you feel them too."
Great ending!
I like the way you put so much thought into your poetry...who knew a trip to the movies could be inspiration.

[roarke]

I feel a strong relation between the piece and the author notes....maybe combine them somehow in another write. I like the phrase: "trying to write out loud" indeed.

[eglantine]

i love those last two lines!

[Kelsey]

I can't help but wonder what you had in mind when you wrote this. I try to figure it out, and I think that's the beauty of this piece: not quite knowing what you mean.

[dukovan]

Yeah i'll write from my brain sometimes and try to think about it alot, other times such as with this piece i just try to feel it, and hope you feel it too. It was a more emotional piece to write. If you want to know, it takes place in a movie theater and afterwards when it slowly sinks in throughout the rest of the night, all the way up until my little lady is sleeping next to me and i'm still awake, and I wonder what she dreams about.

[Kelsey]

Knowing that makes me appreciate it and its beautify so much more.

[Ees]

Interesting little thing here.
I think it could use a little more in the middle, clearly defining the moment in time verses what you are writing, if I am interpreting this properly...

In the beginning who are you speaking of? The people on the stage? Is that like that old New Riders of the Purple Sage song, Lonesome LA Cowboy, the part that goes: "WHEN ALL THE SHOWS ARE OVER, HONEY,
TELL ME, WHERE DO YOU THINK I GO?"- it made me think of that anyway.

In the last line of the third stanza, I'd cut the "so". you just don't need it and it sounds a little clunky there.

Good job overall though, I like this. I can smell it.