Separate stories

You didn't even check to see if I called.
An alabaster anticipation sitting close to the phone.
Now I'm waiting for a different kind of clue.
Writing notes on leaves for my children's fall.

I don't know what to do,
and no one knows but you,
so I call a name I once knew.

Swinging rusty swings with
camaraderie and drinks.
I'm creaking in my skin
the same I hoped I'd shed.

You didn't even flinch when I fell.
Now I've got a pale black eye, can you tell?
Now we're waiting in the same room,
analyzing clues for different stories.

I don't need a thing,
I'm losing all my leaves.
Its a consequence to you.

You didn't even mention the direction we fall.
I must've misplaced my glasses
and you,
you saw it all.

Your serpent DNA is swallowing your legs
and you,
you did this all.

The ghost of regret is separate from me,
and I am a separate story.
The ghost of you is regretting me,
and you,
you're such a separate story.

Reviews

[Lena Rossmore]

I love the 'alabaster anticipation'. The entire poem just pieces together perfectly!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

There are so many great images in this! That first stanza right off is stark like the "alabaster anticipation" and "Writing notes on leaves for my children's fall." The feeling is set that this is a time of reassessing lives and goals and whether the paths will be the same.
"Now we're waiting in the same room,
analyzing clues for different stories.' Absolutely love those lines!
Not even going to quote any more because there is so much here. I do not know the background, but for me, this brings feelings of the time before the breakup and all the things that come with it.

[eglantine]

Beautiful... love the DNA image as well as the pale black eye. Great focus on the emotive... I kind of want a bit more as to the why of the poem.

[dukovan]

I feet the same way actually.

[dukovan]

lol feet

[eglantine]

lol

[Owlgirl]

Well done. I'm not sure I quite get it, but great job. I love the descriptions and vocabulary you used to really get the imagery across.

[afra]

I'm losing all my leaves.
Its a consequence to you.
i loves this part ...thank you so much for sharing this