If its all a dream, its alright.

It's a simile I've seen.
When things aren't as they seem,
is when they're most clear to me.

I read tomorrows paper,
but the forecast was wrong,
The words blurred into grey,
but the rain didn't come.

We were some letters
that were ripped to shreds,
and for all of those words,
they just couldn't make sense.

Now we're a puzzle,
just to know what it all meant.
I'm fine if you're fine.
You said, "Time for bed."

White sand from a sun that wont set.
Where we'd never sleep,
its funny in that,
we're still in our bed,
in our heads.

Don't you leave,
I'm already spent.
My soles wore my soul,
and the sand is stained red.

Its like chasing my shadow
that I'll never catch.
So now I'm waiting for nightfall,
where these thoughts can all blend.

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

Wow. Very well written and emotional, great job! I love this one!

[afra]

pretty deep ....good work

[olla]

I had to read it several times to finally grasp something to hold on to.. in the end it was seeing each verse as a stand alone piece and then putting it all together into one piece.. I believe it is a song lyrics is it not..? It should work well with good music..

[Laura Maidah]

First word needs an apostrophe. Tomorrow's needs an apostrophe.

Last Its too.

[Laura Maidah]

"We were some letters,
that were ripped to shreds,"

[Laura Maidah]

"I'm fine if you're fine.
You said, "Time for bed.""

[Laura Maidah]

"My soles wore my soul,
and the sand is stained red."

[Laura Maidah]

Last quote^i'm swimming in your authenticity.

Sorry for the multiples. It's eating my revs for some reason.

I loved it. Seriously brilliant

[dukovan]

Thanks a lot. Yeah I'm a terrible speller, as with my grammar. So its probably good that these are meant to be sang...sung? Idfk

lol

[Laura Maidah]

it's probably. i had you send you a PM. My phone won't do crits properly. I'll do that for more. I love your work. For serious, man.

[dukovan]

I think you might be one of my favorites on here already. "It's probably"...ha!

[Laura Maidah]

I tried to do a heart symbol, but it won't let me.

[dukovan]

Weird, me neither.