Scales and Claws

A scene, a moment of battle and escape.....

Snap and snarl, 

flash of white, 

jaws slam shut, 

breathe of blight. 

Close to call, 

blade sunk deep, 

pray to God,

my life to keep.

Fleet of foot,

this hellish spawn,

none are left,

I'm now alone.

In this chamber,

a battle cry,

bloody rage,

one last try.

Scaly skin,

metallic coat,

one quick cut,

slice the throat.

Now I escape,

worse for wear,

I have a need,

to get out of here.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Twilight]

It seems as if you fled the scene of battle, that's pretty clear. So, you must have left your Superman cape at home?

Well, the monster does seem jolly fierce lol. I couldn't help wondering what inspired this wild beast, to leap out of your imagination? From how you describe it, it certainly seems rather lizard-like and unrelenting in pursuit of you. The "breath of blight" line rings true, in terms of this hideous monster having lizard-like features. For example, the horrendous Komodo Dragon species, can actually kill; using germs and bacteria (which infect it's prey when bitten). The prey are then sometimes followed by a Komodo Dragon, whilst it simply waits for them to die. Of course, it's strong jaws are mighty formidable too; but at least Dave ran away quickly enough (and still felt worse for wear poor chap!). But, only after taking a bloody slice out of this hideous creature's throat! Thanks for sharing, Dave; and keep on writing..!

[Dave W.]

The inspiration was a prompt in one of my groups, thankyou for this most excellent review

[Twilight]

I see, and thanks. Yes, I spotted it in the same group as you. And, wrote a short piece to the same prompt. I just wrote a slightly humourous short story, in response; involving a monstrous human being (a barbarian of a kind).

[Dave W.]

Oh, it's nice to meet you

[Twilight]

Keep writing too, and hope that you post more for people to read here; as well.

[Dave W.]

Thank you very much for the encouragment

[Rustling Leaves]

Great descriptions! It's so vivid and violent. Did you mean "breath of blight?" It fits more with the rhythm you established. I loved the praying to god, a display of desperation but also submission towards the reality he is in. Then the "fleet of foot," and "I'm now alone," describing the way his opponents fled from him. But this isn't ideal because he is inside a battle chamber where he has to fight for his life. Now he kills another monster? Or a guard? It's done skillfully and silently, which adds to the imagery of his escape. So what I have gathered in that the main character is in a chamber-like place that is filled with dragon-like creatures who are determined to kill him. He goes through close encounters, so they flee from him during his successes and pounce on him during his weakness. A battle cry for his morale and bloody rage, which is frustration and stubborn will in the face of another battle. One last try, as he handles another brush with death. He kills another, swiftly, emphasizing his skill and adaption to his opponent. He is still exhausted and unable to heal as long as he is in this chamber. "I have a need to get out of here." I would too, wow. Obviously this is just my own interpretation and I saw several other ways your words could be taken as. It's a great piece of writing and very interesting to read. I loved it!

[Dave W.]

Thank you very much, this is perfectly what I was going for, this poem came from a prompt from one of my groups.

[Tumi]

Creepy, intense, strongly narrated, i loved the pacing and flow

[Dave W.]

Thankyou Tumi

[Jeyanthi]

Though it is nature vs man.... sometimes we are bound with boundaries, where there is no way to escape... your poem rhymes and symbolizes that ...
Is it Dino 😄 in picture ? If it so thinking circling inside the past always gives a feeling of lost, where we are chased always and can't change it...
But to me, it's like Man vs nature.. cutting down trees and trees plea with no where to go...

[Dave W.]

This was supposed to be a moment of battle with a monster and narrowly escaping, thank you for the review.

[Jeyanthi]

Yeah 😀..... they say "don't feed your monsters ". Rage battle escape...

[Jeyanthi]

God is our true rescuer... :)

[Dave W.]

Jey I always love your incite and great reviews, thank you

[Jeyanthi]

Thank you so much...
The writing seems Scaly skin,
metallic coat,
one quick cut,
slice the throat... like from disturbed mind that's why asked... hope it's just an imaginary writing.. 😀

[Dave W.]

Absolutly imaginary