Dante: A Samurai's Vengence-Prologue

The Prologue

       My name is Dante Bontenmaru; countless victims have asked me the question, “What kind of monster are you?”  It continually slices at my heart because I am neither a monster, nor a merciless creature of death. In my opinion they would not have died had they not been guarding the information I needed in order to kill the current Shogun who rules us now, he is the true monster. A living scourge upon our once great country.

Now comes the hardest part of my journey leaving my brothers, sister, and my grandmother. I now teach my brothers the way of the samurai. At first, they were unwilling to learn the old ways, until I explained the nature of my mission, and the vital importance of them protecting our family has to play in the grand scheme of it all. I fear that I may be too late to teach them properly, but they will know more than enough to keep our family safe. "Again!" I shout at them, forcing them to practice their stances once more. Several weeks have passed now since I began to teach them. Their growth and knowledge have been exceeding all of my prior expectations, they are even passing my rate of growth. Perhaps, its in our blood to become samurai. 

 Now three months have gone by, with blazing speed and accuracy my little brothers grew up to be extraordinary swordsmen. I barely recognize them now. Asakura, the youngest of the two, was so short and frail in stature you could almost say the young man with his name is merely an imposter. Aoki, the older one, was already an imposing young man in terms of sheer size. Now he is a solid wall of muscle, and has a deadly accuracy with the sword that will make even the most experienced swordsman lose his grip long enough for Aoki to claim victory. Having finished up all that I can teach them in the way of the sword, I name them,Tsuindoragnzu, 'Twin Dragons.

The shogun, a man he is no longer, rather he is a plague set upon our lands bringing death and destruction to all. His thirst for power, was so strong that an evil sealed within the Forbidden City, stirred and beckoned to him. He unleashed this horrid spirit and the Oni took control of his mind, darkening his thoughts further. I have taken it upon myself to free our people from the evil walking as man. Waking up this terror is not his only sin though. While he was still man, he had the love of my life taken from me, in an attempt to recruit me to his campaign of blood and tyranny. I told him no, and that was his response. So not only must he die for his evil as a beast, but also his sins as a man. This is my only purpose for my life right now. I hope that there is still time to save both of their souls, his sins must be answered while he is a man, so I must purge him of the evil.

 Mei Sakura, I will find and bring you back home with me, otherwise my life will be forfeit.

Author's Note

I am doing an overhaul on this story. It being my first work, I wish to improve it even further than just grammar. There is more in depth detail and more time frame given, not a time itself, but you now have a somewhat clearer time of events.

Reviews

[Kuandio]

Strong opening paragraph in terms of content, but the way it was presented was a bit confusing, I had to read it a couple times to really understand it (maybe that's just me though). Are you going to keep the entire story in first person? Generally, it's recommended that you do, otherwise it can make the third person narrator seem intrusive to the reader. You should go over it a few more times. It's pretty short. Lots of interesting ideas that could be extrapolated a bit. I like the last line about him going to save her