dana

I'm single. I have a girlfriend. 

i'm not scared of s**t. there's a spider in this room.

I sleep good at night. I barely sleep at night.

I got money. I got a job. I don't work. i'm in love.

i'm heartbroken. we're an ugly couple.

she's beautiful. life is good. life could be better.

I cry sometimes for hours. i'm happy all the time.

so don't try to figure me out. 

Reviews

[Paul]

Documentation
1/27/2020
4:26 PM U.S.A. MST
This review content authored by PB Jacobs (www.writerscafe.org).
My review content of "Dana," by h d e rushin.

Are you same? It sounds like you're cranky and having a bad day. Let me guess, you took it out on Dana, in writing?

Well, I'll keep my review content brief. I'm bound to hit a nerve with you, as I'm a mealy-minded worm.

Thanks for the gossip. Why is it that I have this feeling that no matter what I put in this review, it will piss you off?

I'm a Grade School type...

I guess you gotta get input to figure me out. Nah, my type will make you Excedrin, in my opinion.

Peace...
Peace, again, just to be sure...

Oh no, I mustn't piss you off...

It's a male ESP of mine...

PB Jacobs

[h d e rushin]

no way. i'm never, never, ever pissed off.
and thanks for stopping by.....dana

[Paul]

Awesome! I'll be back, sooner or later! Thanks for the head's up about you not being pissed off. PB Jacobs

[redzone]

to know you Dana is to know your poetry, no figuring out needed.... it's all there nicely written down, disorganized or not, a beat or abstract, surreal, or crystal clear and all wonderful to read.... you are h d e rushing, says so right there under "author"... ;0)

[h d e rushin]

don't you get to a point sometimes Red, where you become ambiguous as a matter of comprehension and discernment. Like Crane who deliberately tried to be mis-understood. That's where poetry is in todays writing world. But thank you my dear friend for those kind comments....dana

[redzone]

Perhaps, but my feelings of ambiguity usually come when I feel lost; feel like I’m not sure where I’m going or even who I am or want to be.... but always, I want to understand, to know the why’s of everything... and hopefully this search is reflected in the poetry, even when the answers are elusive or impossible to find...

Didn’t know this about Crane mainly because I have not read enough of his work (you refer to Stephen Crane??) so now my curiosity is peeked....

But in my wanting to understand, do you really want to be mis-understood, or that you feel you are mis-understood??? the later I have felt on many occasions....

[Beccy]

Isaac Newton was a very clever chap and he was the first to explain that tides were caused by the gravitational interaction between the Earth and the Moon; and of course he also pondered wisely on the apple. But I bet he would be hard pushed to put a scientific twist on life as you tell it. Plus, he was wrong about apples; they only fall straight down because they like rolling around in dew kissed grass. :))

Great poem.

Beccy.

[h d e rushin]

old Isaac also integrated the phenomena of colors into the science of light. Thus he became one of the early poets, since the responsible of poetry is to both to protect and then illuminate the consequences of both truth and longing. Thank you my love for your wonderful words....dana

[emmajoy]

' I cry sometimes for hours. i'm happy all the time. - so don't try to figure me out. ; I know that feeling!

Our personal space and its goings on can twirl the mind, spirit and body into dervish thoughts.. and what pleasure can be had under those circumstances, dana. We are who we are when we want to be.. human nature being what it is or rather, what we;d like to to be. Not sure that your title infers dichotomy but, doesn it go well with dana!

As ever an intriguing write: all power to your 2020 furtherance of language, dana

[h d e rushin]

thank you dearest. I am currently working on my second play. My first play was unfortunately forgettable. But I still pop in and out of the café sometimes with a new poem or two....dana

[emmajoy]

Whisper to the wind, dear friend: success is like chewing food, it comes when you even enjoy the taste of the cabbage!! (or any abhorred veg!)

Much luck with your play . Let me know when the curtain rises, please. Meantime: Happy New Everything, dana.

[barleygirl]

Being bipolar, I am what they call a "rapid cycler" . . . I can go in & out of moods in a matter of minutes. This poem feels like that, but it doesn't have to define a mood disorder . . . I believe most people hop around in a moody bird-peck of emotions & feelings. I am a writer who tends to complicate because I love finding unusual words . . . but I admire how you keep it simple, since it lets the rolling wave of changing emotions stand out as your central sensation (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[h d e rushin]

you want to get totally confused by poetry...Read the January issue of "Poetry". It, in no way, resembles what we do here. And one would even assume that they've not been exposed to the same template of lifes choices, sounds, heartbreaks, failures and sugar highs, that we on the café have. Thanks for your kind words my friend...and happy new year to you...dana

[barleygirl]

There is a ton of writing out there that I merely plow thru, wondering why it hits the best seller lists or being considered a classic!?!?! I don't get most poetry, so I don't read it, except here. I read many books every month & most of it, I can't stand! *smile*

[Robert Trakofler]

Hurry hurry come step write up, come try your hand at the perspective wheel, and costs only one drop of blood! Amaze you friends astonish your neighbors, are you short are you tall are you happy or rolled into a ball, no one knows what throws are in this moments compose:) don't waste your time on that other guy guessing your weight, some days the gravity does dissipate changing the measurements to glad or irate! As sure as that nose that's on your face... The great wheel of perspective! Is the only one that knows what's in case:)

[h d e rushin]

i'm laughing because the perspective is true as hell. It's no use trying to figure out the mind of another complex being. may as well just roll with it, until "it" makes a fist and punches the dead air. Thanks Bad...dana

[Robert Trakofler]

a beautiful mind like yours never changes no matter what the perspective dear Dana its always a bright and shiny thing

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my! i feel the whirlwind of conflicting everything ...and like it or not Dana ...i know you a bit better now ;))))))))))) and i luv ya girl! your "dana" is packed full of honesty, vulnerability and chutzpah ... an incredible mix of delight says i!
E.
ps. Big Happy New Year .. all year .. so glad you stick around the Cafe' :)
pss. my youngest son was and remains terrified of spiders .. his sisters use to have to get rid of them from his room when he discovered them .. his brother would only laugh at him ;)

[h d e rushin]

I read somewhere that every human swallows at least 7 spiders per year. And for that I rest my case. Thanks dearest Einstein.....dana

[Einstein Noodle]

arrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrgh! say it isn't so!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :-O

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are definitely a poet...this is our life from one line to another, from one metaphor to another....
we write because we have to, we write because we don't have to.
Our poetry has meaning, our poetry isn't worth the paper it is printed on.
we are voice to be heard, we are a voice to be silenced.
"i am me and you are he we are altogether....see how they run"
love this piece...
j.

[h d e rushin]

My poetry teacher at Wayne State University would always come to class with a different shirt on. Not a different suit or tie, just a different shirt. It was his idea of revolution I guess. But he, like you, always had a fresh poem to read to us. We are a complex bunch , I guess. We change our shirts but not our approach. We love and hate and are heartbroken and get sunburned, and have the wealth of kings but live as poor as church mice. It is humanity that we love Jacob.. even.more than we can ever love the human around us.....thanks brother...dana

[KTizzle]

I feel so swept away into someone's existence and the whirlwind of human life- how crazy it can get, and the many faces that arise. There's an air of acceptance and in the last line that I enjoyed.

[h d e rushin]

I think you're right Kianna. And air of resolve is more accurate I think. We accept the complexity of ourselves and sometimes in favor of our need for romance, money or love...thank you my dear...dana