Corns'field

Corns'field

A Poem by h d e rushin

If it is night that the singing of crickets
take their leap of song, bright as peaches, low hung
and blanched with sunlight. We are in need,
us tall folk, flung like Bronx throw rugs
over the railings of high rises. Women smiling
in their back tied dresses; their mauve hats with
long pins to keep the feathers
tight above the gale. So

we pass in old Fords
with the windows cranked two inches above our deaths.
Our bare feet on metal runners
with glowing flies stuck to the front grill
and the AM radio beginning to burst.
We see thru the corns'field
the distant slaves behind them thru the breaks.
Pinetop Perkins clamoring at their teeth

as the song of every man rambles:
see'th the rhythm of great pain
otherwise as toil.

© 2018 h d e rushin


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Lovely piece. Very descriptive. I felt like I was transported to the place you so perfectly described.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Amazing imagery.this is an exceptional poem to read.well done!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


h d e rushin

6 Years Ago

thank you beloved for those kind remarks./ dana
There's something special about a man who wears history around his heart.. then, lets it stream into truth, every emotion in places distant yet always near because they existed. Damned weeds, the off white cotton stained by blood and their reflection. You know and understand language, be it base or floral, rough or silky fine. Incredible how in certain areas, at certain times the past bounces back and creates a hell on earth, isn't it. Ok, sorry. Gone into eulogy mode that grows too much.. not intended.. not at all.

Posted 6 Years Ago


things change and yet they stay the same...
bringing in the old, the past, the slaves...and yet, those who are slaves to poverty, violence...every man is every man, no matter the generation or color...
and the Bronx...the throw rungs on the overhangs...i remember those from my days in the Bronx...seems like another life.
you make pictures with your words---but you put us into the pictures...that is a talent.
j.

Posted 6 Years Ago


h d e rushin

6 Years Ago

thank you my dear friend for those comments...and yes, you're the only person around here with those.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

and those roots are pretty silver now----:)
This is a beautifully written poem.

'If it is night that the singing of crickets
take their leap of song, bright as peaches, low hung and blanched with sunlight.'

The above are words you wonderfully put together in such a poetic way.

I must admit that grammatically, in those words quoted above, the sentence is what is called an introductory clause; it seems incomplete in tone before you put a full stop.
if you didn't put 'if' at the beginning, it would have been a complete sentence on its own and the full stop would be correct at the end of 'sunlight':

'It is night that the singing of crickets
take their leap of song, bright as peaches, low hung and blanched with sunlight. (full stop)

Yet, notice carefully, if you added 'if' it's as though you still had to add something more to say after 'sunlight'
(Therefore, since there is an 'if', a comma (,) is needed after sunlight.

But, of course if you have your reasons then that's fine.

As writers we're here to read, appreciate and get inspired from each other.
Yet we can, with good intentions, point out errors to help each other grow as poets and writers, knowing that we have thousands of people reading, learning and examining our words.
It's only right that we present a good finished product.

WELL DONE!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


BlackPrince

6 Years Ago

I think writing poems in your journal is a very good thing indeed. I still prefer to write with pen .. read more
BlackPrince

6 Years Ago

Oh yeah!! I'm not sure whether you do this already, but I would advise you to always date your poems.. read more
h d e rushin

6 Years Ago

I've never really thought of doing any dating of my poems.. But I do understand "dating" as a contin.. read more
You think you are right here, but when you think about it you are everywhere you have ever been, and everywhere your people ever were.

Posted 6 Years Ago


h d e rushin

6 Years Ago

so true my friend Delmar..Poetry as a means of transport.....I do understand. since history is more .. read more
Delmar Cooper

6 Years Ago

"history is more probable than possible...." And more portable too.
this is so very good in my opinion hd ... i absolutely love the time frame of it and the feel of not only the Bronx all five boroughs in their own rights .. before i got to your referencing "slaves" there is a distinct Black voice ... tho we can all be slaves to one thing or another ..especially our jobs ... a whole lot of tings that impress my conjured images .. old Fords ... Bronx throw rugs hung etc. .. windows cracked ..bare feet on metal ... and the crickets..my goodness how wonderfully you have brought them out of the night..bright as peaches ...i guess i think every line is masterful .. i think this is one to be published more widely ... a keeper for sure says i ..love love love your voice ma'am
E.

Posted 6 Years Ago


h d e rushin

6 Years Ago

you're my hero. And by hero I mean that you see the victory before the battle is won. Perhaps you dr.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

you are so welcome..thank you for sharing your mwahvelous poetry! see ya 'round!
interesting write my friend,like the mention of flies in the grill

Posted 6 Years Ago


h d e rushin

6 Years Ago

I think, wordman, like I that the ride on that country road gave to us a different insight. like wan.. read more
 wordman

6 Years Ago

my pleasure

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