dating profile

 

 

 

as of august 9:

 

 

Black male

 

50ish

 

5'10"

 

190lbs

 

brown eyes

 

one foot larger than the other

 

college grad

 

navy vet

 

ATT retiree

 

hates loud noises

 

loves cats

 

writes prolifically, clumsy, diffuse poetry

 

loves the smell of baking biscuits

 

hates movies

 

can be vulgar

 

cancer survivor

 

had a bone marrow transplant

 

 

neat freak

 

plays the lottery

 

believe in dreams

 

adores Dickinson

 

can tolerate Whitman

 

worships Plath

 

will give away anything

 

lives in Detroit

 

on the bad side of town

 

on a street where people fight

 

hates duplicity

 

tragedian

 

plants a garden

 

shoos away squirrels

 

kinda different

 

calls drag queens and prostitutes friend

 

jazz lover

 

music historian

 

did I mention cat lover?

 

good typing skills

 

loves birds but hates bird s**t

 

on the windshield of his gray 98 Honda

 

passionate

 

Can fall in love again

 

if just  given the chance .

Reviews

[caesarkreshen]

hey dude.

A few things I'd suggest. I notice a lot of the reviews that people give are very much this is what I felt while reading. I feel kind of like a rain cloud. ALAS. I must.

I like this overall.

Few things that catch my eyes are:

one foot in the grave after you already spoke of your feet. Even the saying one foot in the grave can be seen as a cliche.

I think love birds but hates s**t could work without the second birds.

And I must mention the "Did I mention cat lover"

the reason that stands out to me is not because it's a joke repeat but because that's the only part of the whole piece where you said "I." I don't think it should say "I."

Anyway, thereyago. Of all of the things I mentioned, the only one that I really think I would implore you to think about is the I.

[sienikeha]

ah! i hope you posted this in the personals!

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

glad this got some reviews...read it the other day; wanted to revisit and say a few words. by far one of the most courageous and important pieces of writing I've seen on this site.

[Kristallo]

"adores Dickinson
can tolerate Whitman
worships Plath" - This stood out, as I feel much the same as you do on that regard. I like the way that you approached this, writing about yourself and your desires in such a choppy, endearing fashion made it enigmatic and very appealing. You've captured your essence with few, strong, and brilliant words. I adore it.

[Emily B]

i may be your biggest fan

[JourneyBlu]

Nice h d. Your poem made me smile early this morning and made me want to see the face behind the simple honesty. Thank you for a great start to my day and for sharing!