Obsession...[Edited 11-1]

Edited [full] version!!

Obsession, in a crooked mind
Discretion and the peace we find.
Desire comes but soon subsides
Relief over-comes our pride.
Discontentment mixes in

Causing us to fall to sin.
Failure consumes those who try
Intuitions force you to deny.
Forget yourself and all your pain
Strive to push until you're sane.
Weakness dissolves your sanity

Forcing you to fall beneath.
Beneath your soul is all your hatred
Tearing up the love you wasted.
Torn apart but still together
Your heart sinks down like a concrete feather.

Reviews

[just is]

this is very well written, like the emotion put into it.

[Wildecat]

I'm impressed, a very nice write.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow very impresive write!!
Well said!!! :)