Funny. Don't you think? You wear your moral code like a costume, faded from too many uses since it belongs to everyone else. A chameleon who changes its colors for any occasion.
Very expressive with excellent imagery. I love the use of the tires to describe the weight of bad choices. I think it's best taken in two parts, but I enjoyed this read.
To tell you the truth D I love the first part and really don't like the second.
Funny.
Don't you think?
You wear your moral code
like a costume,
faded
from too many uses
since it belongs
to everyone else.
A chameleon
who changes
its colors
for any occasion.
This is powerful and complete in its own right.
The second part is a bit campy. A nice metaphor but the writing does not have the clarity of thought and level of talent you expressed in the line, "You wear your moral code like a costume".
IMO take it out. But, if you insist on leaving it at least change massive pounds to massive load. Trucks carry loads. Truck driver's might carry pounds but that's another poem perhaps.
I want to hate the way you've structured this because the pauses are in strange and unnatural places for reading, but I can't. I don't know exactly why it does, but it works. I really like the ending, after all the lead up, it's offhand and quite clever. Nothing to complain about here.
Oh, I've played the chameleon before myself... hoping to be invisible or fade into something I'm not. Your words bring alive that emotional landscape in a vivid way!
not so funny here haha I like it! (and the title - I thought it'd be something else - so it's a nice play on what to expect and then the actual content!)
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