TRUTH

I believe in Karma.

Lost in a world you’ve conjured,

for whose sake other than your own?

Standing atop the mountain

you, alone, have created;

shattered pieces of souls taken,

cheated lives piled high.

The ground upon which you stand

is an illusion; threatening to crumble.

Do you feel the tremble?

The truth is buried inside;

the truth you try so hard to hide.

Tell me, what will become of you,

when your mountain comes crashing down;

while you lay broken amongst the spirits

of those you’ve manipulated?

Tell me, what will become of you

when the truth is set free?

Author's Note

Here's hoping there is justice.

Reviews

[Robin]

truth swimming in responsibility ~

[David W Moore III]

Ooo I like this. The imagery is fantastic and of course, justice is always the best desert

[Dupree]

I am very impressed by this poem. Very strong wording and reminds of a few people I know.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a vast feel to this piece.. yet a deeply personal voice echoing through those mountains.. The injustice.. hidden for a time.. but all with be unveiled in time... it always is.. and then the truth will open the door to justice.. Powerful words!

[just rose.]

Yeah, they do say that if a person burns enough bridges sooner or later they're going to burn the one they're on. I think kindness is sorely overlooked in this world, and compassion. You evoke this in a stately, controlled style that is full of grandeur and perspective. I love the line breaks here. Just excellent my friend.

[Brasso]

Let's see where to start. Nice flow, Great imagery (I literally had this little man standing atop a mountain of souls in my head). The flow between lines suggests the ongoing struggle between the speaker and the other character or is possibly an irony to how there is no justice even though it be dealt swiftly and with precision (if that makes sense). An interesting theme that makes the tone of the speaker all the more impressive. My favourite line was 'shattered pieces of souls taken,' even though I read 'taken' as 'broken' for some reason ... perhaps that was what I expected. hut I did read it again correctly and found it breathtaking
Cheers,
Brasso

[Michael X]

wow, the meaning is open enough that it allows the reader to imply
the specific details to one's own experience, and I'm sure many have
felt this way before, which is the awsome thing about this writing,
it's artful and relatable at the same time, excellent job word crafting.

[Crowley]

Always comes crashing down...always. How much s**t has to happen before the crashing is the sad part. Nice tirade here Girly Q, I like it, you layed it out nicely, and where do these people come from?

[A.Lee]

This is excellent. I love the truth behind this poem. People get to the top of their mountains by stepping on and breaking countless people... sooner or later they'll fall and land in the dirt with them when the truth comes out. Well written poem.