Demons

Tears burn my skin as I stare up into a black abyss.
Clawing at the blinding pain that rages inside me
my soul fills with sorrow.
As I lay bleeding upon the earth I scream.

Demons watching…..silently waiting...
...I feel you

So few words barely whispered.
Broken shards fall as the world shatters.
Oh, what of this hell that I’ve conjured before me?
My heart cries out in agony.

Demons judging….coldly hating…
...I hear you

Erase the blood stains from my hands,
spill my blood upon the ground instead.
Take me as I stand before you,
I sacrifice myself for all that is true.

Demons crouching….slowly approaching…
...I see you

With my last breath I implore you,
make right all that has been wronged.
And as the night slowly fades away,
I’m shown a glimpse of the life that has been saved.

Demons clawing….savagely devouring…
...I thank you

Author's Note

As always, thank you for reading. Any thoughts shared will be more than appreciated.

Reviews

[Hannah]

I love this, the build of the tension and the darkly beautiful choice of words. The "Demons..." bits between verses have a lovely pace. The line "Oh, what of this hell that I've conjured before me" is one of my favourites, and the poem as a whole is brilliant.

[OT]

o wow!! dark indeed!!! first stanza got me! so deep!! first - love the sensate kind of image flashes - see, hear, feel - adds to the 'aura' - makes it creepy!! secondly - some very powerful images - just spinning in eldritch ripples!! flow is great as with all of your stuff! favourite lines have to be:

"So few words barely whispered.
Broken shards fall as the world shatters."

[Brad]

we are our own demons and each others angels...sometimes...visa versa

[David W Moore III]

Ahh. The self sacrifice to the demons poem! I think we all have one something like this, but yours is quite striking with it's italicized demon interludes. Quite bleak but shining with it's own light as you have saved another (whether you damned them in the first place or not is immaterial as your redemption still shines especially considering the sacrifice made. Nicely dark, driven piece.

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Drock,

I do enjoy the darkerside. Creating something dark within, but you shouldn't destroy it. Enjoy it, feed from it. Learn. Become something much more dangerous. It's exciting.

Regards,

Matthew

[deeps]

This really touched me here. It hit me in the gut and heart.
I thought this was really well written and expressed.
I really like this. I love the ending.