Valentine

Valentine

A Poem by drivebypoet
"

true story about lost friendship and love

"

 

                                    Valentine

  When the wild winds of Feburary

  whip the waves in the estuary

  and the doleful doldrums

  drip from my brain

  like icicles,

  from a gutter

  I shutter

  and think of you

  I think about Valentines

  and how I drew a heart on my arm

  with an arrow

  and it said T.D.

  I thought it would make you smile

  I thought it would make you laugh

  you were having a bad day

  I thought it would make you say

  ohhhhhhhhhhhhh

  I had hopes your eyes would fill

  and brim with tears

  and one would slide down your cheek

  and I would touch it

  I had hopes that a faraway anger

  born

  before I knew

  I loved you

  had died

© 2010 drivebypoet


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the doleful doldrums
drip from my brain
like icicles,
from a gutter
I shutter
and think of you
I think about Valentines
and how I drew a heart on my arm
with an arrow

I so loved these words here, this is a heart breaking write really.
Very well expressed and written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The result of expectations gone "bad" is clearly expressed as you slip from phrase to phrase like a tear sliding down the cheek.....nice write!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well written well organized: well said. This flows very well and changes pace where it needs to. I really don't have a whole lot of criticism for this, it's very personal yet, for me, is easy to connect to, that's good poetry, simple as that. Thanks for writing something worth reading, I hope I was of some help to you.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the doleful doldrums
drip from my brain
like icicles,
from a gutter
I shutter
and think of you
I think about Valentines
and how I drew a heart on my arm
with an arrow

I so loved these words here, this is a heart breaking write really.
Very well expressed and written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is a feeling of such anticipation.. excitement.. and this moves to a darkness of bittersweet beauty. Wonderfully written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Heartbreaking...the words build you up and then dash you at the end...so much emotion in a few words...great work!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on July 13, 2010
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Tags: lost love, lost friendship

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drivebypoet
drivebypoet

Opelika, AL



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