Maiden of my Eye

You are the woman for me;
Though others may try,
They won't find me,
No matter how much they cry.

You are the woman I see,
My destiny and purpose;
Entwined around thee,
All others can only assume, I suppose?

The one who makes life better,
With whom I want forever;
I feel like a pacesetter,
Because you are my forever.

I close my eyes this instant,
I see my life before me,
Though all of it seems instant,
It's with you I'd rather be.

My friend, my lover, my wife,
Closer than a brother ever,
Intimately giving life,
Bringing out the best in me, my lever.

I love you so much, truly,
I tell everyone, e'en facebook;
And if they prefer to be surly,
I'll tell them sit on this hook.

I pour my love on you,
As though it was perfume,
Till the scent speaks to you,
Through your senses and the fume

I love you, my lovely angel,
You came to help my life;
Even though you're not evangel,
Your words reshaped my life..

Reviews

[Trigorin]

This is nice, but check your spelling and grammar, and you might want to reconsider some of your word choice as well. Some of it feels a little stilted and awkward, and seems rather forced. You have a good concept here and a few rather lovely turns of phrase but those other errors really blot out the good things about this piece.

[Andrew]

Thanks for your candid thoughts..

[Liz Alexander]

There is one things that I know for sure. I cannot wait to be loved like this. Your wife is a very lucky person.

[Andrew]

You will be loved like this...thanks and I know that its me who's lucky to have been loved first of her. check out what she wrote on her blog for my birthday.. http://t.co/0wSAP3Tzks..thanks for the review, will review more of your poems later on.