Night Time Escapades

A short little drabble fiction story, I wrote for a contest based around the words Skinny Dipping. It was much harder than I thought it would be to write a story with a hundred word limit.

She swam languidly, letting the water caress her pale skin. The click of a door opening startled her; no one was supposed to be home yet! Someone emerged, nude as well. His skin dark and rough from hours in the sun, and light brown hair with sun-streaks that also betrayed his lifestyle, memory identified him as the son of her current conquest. A very attractive boy, and out of bounds, his chocolate eyes appraised her. Confident in his movements, he approached pool a small flex of muscles gave way to his intentions. She moved before he cannon-balled into the pool.

Reviews

[Craig Bates]

Thank you for the entry in my drabble contest. I was so so close to putting this in the top three and I'll explain now why I didn't...

I decided that my main concern in judging the entries would be in effective use of both the word count and the prompt. The prompt you dealt with excellently, not only describing an interesting and entertaining scene but one that felt like there was a lot of depth to it. I felt like you knew these characters very well, even though there is barely any description of them. However, as with another entry, I felt as if you had omitted words to meet the word count at the expense of sense. I wasn't sure that 'he approached pool a small flex of muscles gave way to his intentions' worked. I know it might sound picky but I've been highly critical with regards to the word limits.

However I really did enjoy reading this. As I said, I think there is so much depth through few words. I hope you enjoyed writing drabble and I'd love for you to enter any future contests I run =)