Grey Grace

A poem about a woman/girl that is suffering with the consaquences of blind love.

The grey sky

is holding every lie.

She wants to die.

 

The water is grey too;

waiting to devour something new,

watching tears fall from her eyes so blue.

 

Was she meant to jump?

to fall to her watery grave?

It seemed so, with her life so alone.

 

 A cruel wind came,

whipping her hair, calling her name,

saying,''Your death will give none the blame.''

 

Ah, but the truth she knows.

His essence is as black as the crows.

She now reaps, what he did sow.

 

Innocence lost,

at her own cost.

Life; now colder than frost.

 

But her babe calls.

Catching her; before she falls.

The Penalty of Guilt polls. 

Author's Note

Asusuall, let me know what you think. REVIEWS!!!!!
And let me know if' I should add on to this. :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe need more description. Last lines left a open door. The poem was strong in description and story till the surprise ending.
"But her babe calls.
Catching her; before she falls.
The Penalty of Guilt polls. "
I enjoyed the darkness and the desire of this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Priscilla Sayers]

I think it is done. It has a nice flow and the power of love pulling one away from death, well done!

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Such wonderful words...could feel the emotion...good job...

[Amila Jay]

Nicely laid:)

[Dove]

I really do like this poem. I saw the darkness and I felt the sadness. I think you did a great job. Everyone piece of writing can improve but you still did an amazing job.

[Rene Velez]

really nice write...

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I'm sort of in agree with Coyote about the open door, but maybe its not such a bad thing to leave it so abruptly giving the reader a chance to think about what happened. Thought-provoking, nicely done.

[Calypso]

I understood this is my own way. I see it as she wants to die after her lover left her but she doesn't have the guts to kill herself cause she has a baby. Just what I saw.

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

i love this poem....the sadness and darkness of this piece was outstanding...its fine the way it is but if you feel that you have something to add then you should it will still be a beautiful piece of writing...

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Very sad poem. The loss of love is truly felt.

[Brytt]

I feel this way all the time! My brother is probably one of about three things keeping me here. Beautiful images, good plot, well-written ideas in general.