Freedom

Expression, truth, angel, love, freedom, confiedence

She moves like an angel,

she thinks she's alone,

It flows free, the feeling,

of love, hate, and life.

 

So smooth, soft with confidence,

He sees her but stays quiet.

on and on she dances,

an unending spring of life.

 

He sees the Freedom. She's sure,

There's Love, Laughter and Life,

He knows now he loves her,

He wants her to be his wife.

Author's Note

this was written at a time I was
feeling trapped. Let me know what you think!!!
As always, the truth.:)

Reviews

[zainul]

Is it a case of male domination disregarding the opinion of the woman to make her his wife?
The mystery is enjoyable.
I love the contrast in the aspirations of the man and woman.

[Cre8tive]

Nice! I really liked this one. Short but yet so Powerful !

[Just Me]

This was amazing and I could see why you wrote this when you feeled "trapped" as you put it. I loved how the man feel in love with the woman's ability to be herself. Like a bird flying free in the sky. Nice jo!

[DontBlink158]

This reminds me some what of a book i read. It was really good, the words flow very nicely, and great imagery. That's all i can say, nice job.

[AndyJCash]

I love the creative imagery, of a boy/man witnessing a girl/woman of such freedom and falling in love with that. "on and on she dances, an unending spring of life." A great line and a great poem!

[Honourfish]

A very passionate poem excellently written! keep up the good work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Freedom is odd word when it come to love and relationship. I was free for 36 years. I did great things. I traveled the world volunteering for every war or problem. Today I wouldn't trade anything for the moment I held my daughter for the first time. Now I have my grand kids. I have no freedom. But I have a reason to be alive. I like the poem. Two views were described in the poem. My line in one of my poem somewhere. "Freedom is when you are alone without love, family and walls to hold you. Real freedom is a lonely road." A excellent poem. Made me think.
Coyote

[Poe Redd]

Ooh, really nice one! Maybe I should write happier, more posative poetry... Anyway, the title goes really well, cause the poem itself just feels so free. A light and encouraging read. Love it!

[Yina]

Aw I really like:) You're awesome just like always:) Oh an thanks for the reviews:)

[Tasha]

this was really good, i loved it.