Hope

I just sort of put together a lot of thoughts,so I hope it makes sense to you.

I think of you night and day.

Escape you?I have tried every way,

But your words of love, eyes of truth.

I'm weak,hold me; your strong.

The moments, days without you are so long.

 

I look up and see your eyes,

I'm never to be free again.

You're still holding me, enchanting.

I feel a loud, quiet sigh,

Your letting me go, I can stand alone.

 

But no,I can't,

I'm in the dirt.

I've fallen, but you don't see,

You turned around, you've moved on,

I lay in the dust, crying salty tears

of loss and shame,

hear I am; the dying dame.

 

My greater good, my strength,

has waiked away, moved on.

Once again, hurt triumphs.

It was a battle, it's over now,

and I've lost.

Oh, what i've lost;

I'm losing strength,

no longer in the dust.

 

My blood, in pools, form crimson mirrors

to the sky, threatning evil

Promising to avenge me, to seek revenge,

But  no, I forbid you to harm him.

 

Desparetely almost; I call out,

''I need you, please, please help.

I feel my heart slow,10...9...8...

somehow, I keep breathing,

 

Alas, I can take no more.

I scream in agony,

And my heart;   7...6...5...

I see your eyes once more,

Your eyes!? It's you!

Hold me, mend me.

 

4...3...2...

A confession of love,

your holding me, I feel your strength; hope,

Your eyes, I've been captured and freed,

Your love alone, has restored my life.

 

I'm alive; we are one,

Our love, together

are the rays of the sun,

telling the world of hope.

Forever.

 

 

Author's Note

Let me know, wether it's good or bad; I want to know. :)

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is truly dramatic romance! I am a huge fan of romance, and the passionate complexities of it...therefore, I enjoyed this read immensely. Nice write!

[Amila Jay]

wow, very nice:-)

[Ice Girl]

I really liked it!

[Reaper]

Great ending, and overall awesome poem, well done

[Richard Anthony Goulart]

This was an absolute beauty of the writing that I have had the pleasure of reading. I read and felt the love and the loss? O the loss was a tremendous and powerful fight that I felt with each word that was written.

[Just Me]

I thought it was amazing and I could feel the love and the loss and then the love she felt again. The last stanza was certainly my favorite.

[CraziiDeerz]

I loved how you really showed your emotions clearly. I could easily feel what you were writing. Beatiful poem! :)

[DontBlink158]

That was very moving, you could see what was happening to her. I felt the love, the loss, and the love again. You put a real power behind your words.

[Awkward]

Very powerful ending. Overall great poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

"My blood,in pools,form crimson mirrors
to the sky,threatning evil
Promising to avenge me,to seek revenge,
But no,I forbid you to harm him."
The poem is very good. Use word check to fix minor spelling errors. I like the emotion in the poem. I could feel the desire and struggle in the poem. I like the positive ending to a excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote