Open Doors

I don't know, you tell me:)

 Blood will pour

to the lonely shore

in waves of pain.

 

 In empty silence

there's nothing to gain

but chained hands.

 

 Only I see

that I can be fee,

I can soar

amoung birds and angels.

 

 This pain will gain.

It will; give me.

   open doors

Author's Note

I'm not sure what to say, I tried writing, after a long time of writer's block, but thi seems to sound like all my depressing poems.. But give me your opinion, criticism is welcome:)

Reviews

[Me]

Provocative verses with a subtle yet powerful punch!

[Jagger Cyde]

I think you meant free instead of fee. I think the idea is good, but blood, pain, chains, flying birds, and angels are used a lot. Try to switch them out with something that means the same symbolically. I do like the open doors at the end though.

[Castonovia]

Not a depressing vibe at all... no, lyrical and quite creeeepy, yes. Love the concept of open doors equalling freedom. Very emotional and strong write, well penned piece indeed :)

[Yina]

Different from your other writings, somehow hidden... Don't really know how to explain but there seems to be a hidden meaning or message, if you know what I mean? Like you had something on your mind but didn't quite know how to express those thoughts maybe... It's cool though:)

[Poe Redd]

Its not like all your other poems dolling, it feels like a different style altogether. I like it, i really do! :)

[Soul Fire]

very nice (:

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I dont think it sound depressing at all, actually. But there is a few minor spelling errors that should be fixed. Otherwise, this sounds more positive than negative. Nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem of emotion and struggle. I like the description.
"In empty silence
there's nothing to gain
but chained hands."
I like the way you ended the excellent poem.
Coyote