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Someone asked me to write a poem about a high school novel for them. Some didn'ttt dooo theree homeworkkk.

If he is the moon, she is the earth

To which he can safely return

Her landscape, smitten in ruin

His  landing is crude

 

She lies, scarred with fissures of emotion

Charred forests of shame

Leveled cities of self blame

Drowned shores of broken heartedness

 

The plains of gravity fair ghastly

Scarlet deconstruction distances them

a mere child is the natural disaster

a woman’s pride is the universal remorse

Reviews

[Looouise]

So I've re-read this at least three times, and I think it's pretty neat. And I can't quite come up with something decent to say about it - aside from the fact that those last two lines are pretty powerful.

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. it indeed isn't easy being a woman ... and it's quite nice to read the words of a man who understands ...

[dreamer :)]

This is so good. Says a lot with just the first few words!

[Darwyn Sansalone]

Very well done, great flow, the last two lines have such potency that it's hard to notice how these two lines changes rythym and carries repitition, unlike the rest

[Miss Coral]

Beautiful flow and imagery. Wonderful use of emotion.
The first line draws you in completely.

Great piece.

[cheeeeese]

This is amazing. You can make everything flow effortlessly and I got sucked into it. I loved the first stanza, and might I say, you have a variety of vocabulary words. This was very well-written, amazing job.

[Honeypot]

That first stanza is great. The whole thing is really nice. Is it about a book?

[shanise]

Wow! very well written, it flows easily and its just stunning!
These are my favourite lines.
"Charred forests of shame
Leveled cities of self blame
drowned shores of broken heartedness."

I think they show true emotion, te picture it paints is amazing!

[changeofseason]

This is awesome. It has this spacey, numb feeling about it. I love this part:
"Charred forests of shame
Leveled cities of self blame
Drowned shores of broken heartedness"

You're a great writer.