flashback

tick tick boom
get out of this room
shoot shoot bang
it's all over again
red and white spraying
all over not playing
I'm taking aim
I'm honing i
won't complain
I can't begin
what's black and white
what's left what's right
lost inside a chokehold
my fingers blue I'm so cold
sleeping in the snowdrift
this is over this is it
so forget about life
when you're pinned down tight
forget about me
when I'm thinking about you
can't even speak
when I'm telling the truth
do you want to give up now?
wanna make him fall down
so that you will stand
alone in Delusion Grand
better than Central Station
or the State of the Nation
cause in this empire there's
only one reason to care
it's if your back is turned
when no one's there

Reviews

[Bailey B.]

I agree with ericdeben. I like it. Keep on writing! =^_^=

[Brenden Moran]

I feel like your a bit trapped inside of your rhymes and you get lost inside of that and you lose the point of your poem...whatever that is. But it's pretty good. Good Job.

[ericdeben]

I read this like a rap. And it's a good one at that. Keep writing :)