"Loop"

"Loop"

A Poem by what-the-frick

"I love you. I'll never leave. I won't give up." you said to me.
Then those words, they fell like rain,
I felt the lies, inhaled the pain.
Like all the rest, you left the game,
Before we were half done playing.
You never planned on staying.
Just a detour in your stasis.
Love and motivation on a part-time basis.
It's ok you wouldn't save us,
Because it was never you that made us.

© 2012 what-the-frick


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Wonderfully written. I could feel the raw emotion through each line. I especiallly love the metaphors in this piece! I love the detail and how you presented the emotion and feelings in this piece.
Very relatable, and very well written.
Beautiful piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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what-the-frick
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Astoria & Ever After, OH



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I'm hypersensitive. I feel emotional over things that don't hold substance. You can break my heart with just a look. I don't give up without a fight. My life is a soundtrack. But pay attention, the mu.. more..

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