Wounded Symphony

My experience when I stopped "chasing rainbows"

Sleeping delusions

Casting dreams

Truthful opinions are these

 

Swept by tranquility

Awakened by turmoil

Is this reality or trickery?

 

Bewitched by your magnetism

Captured by your mastery

A mirage. Maybe a remedy.

 

Sacrificed inclusion

Slander you breathe

Cloaked by charisma

But yet, I still feed.

 

Unspoken defeat

Veiled by illusions

Can I abandon this conclusion?

 

Desperate to encompass

This accolade of flight

 

Anguish and resentment

Etched upon my face

Transpired by rage

This ballad of sorts can not be explained

 

Madness concealed by fantasy and desire

Misfortunate acceptance

What a liar!

 

Orchestrated by comfort

Only a fleeting escape

Dignity vanished

A whispered trace.

Author's Note

New here. Excited to receive some feedback. Thanks.

Reviews

[b.platte]

This was very good. I specifically liked the following stanza:

Bewitched by your magnetism
Captured by your mastery
A mirage. Maybe a remedy.

I liked the way this flowed and even thought the last two sentences didn't rhyme exactly it still worked to make it sound good.

Well. done. This was beautifully written. :)

[Amethyst Rose]

Thank you for your honesty. I couldn't quite get the last two sentences the way I wanted to. Thanks for reading :)

[Aiden Cross]

I enjoyed this very much. Its sad. Very sad. Its like you are in love with and sticking with the idea of love. The memory of it that you can't let go. Instead you kill yourself for that idea of what was. The stanza ending in "what a liar". I feel as though you are the liar. In keeping hold to something without promise. I feel for you.

[Amethyst Rose]

Im glad you enjoyed it and thank you for sharing your interpretation. Im touched that you were able to sense the emotions of it as well. Your review is much appreciated.