6 AM

For long nights spent on the beach with a lover who was always my best friend.

6 AM

 

Do you remember when last we talked?

   You saved my soul that night,

   when the ebony blanket did nothing

   to warm me against the chill of life.

Do you remember what words you said?

   We talked above the chatter of

   cappuccino crickets, wired till dawn,

   sharing songs of their own.

Do you remember how you made me laugh?

   The stars danced above us

   as we sat, savoring life’s

   simple amusements.

Do you remember holding me close?

   Beyond the grip of caffeine and

   craziness, you curled into my lap,

   placed your hand in mine, and held onto my heart.

Do you remember the sunrise we saw?

   Night had no boundary on what we would

   share, for 6 AM caressed our spirits

   and still we were as one.

Do you remember the intimacy that night?

   Your spirit made love to mine,

   an ecstasy beyond flesh and blood,

   and my soul felt for the first time in forever.

You don’t remember, but that’s all right,

   the years have passed and still you’re near,

   and we’ve shared so many nights.

Just never forget my love, dear friend,

    is always here for you in turn,

   no matter the boundaries that keep us apart.

So when you need to talk all night or laugh or just be held,

   remember what you mean to me

   as I remember that night,

   each and every one of them.

 

Author's Note

I'm new at sharing, so just don't pick it apart on me or I'll crawl under the Earth and hide.

Reviews

[Neha Bagla]

hey hi...gr8 work dude!!! n u know what...even m sharing my stuff for da 1st time...i know its kinda weird but awesome u write man!!
loved it ...

[Nana Carmine]

Don't worry- I know how that is to share your writing for the first time. It's a lot harder then it sounds to share writing. Let me start off by saying you are a great writer. Don't be too worried about people taring you apart. Personally- from this poem you have some real talent and it shows. Your imagery was perfect and you set the mood so well. I found myself relating to this poem- maybe that's why I liked it so much. But your really are talented. Thank you so much for sharing this with us and I sincerely hope to see more of your writing up around the cafe soon.
That's all for now- I apologize- I tend to get carried away in my comments.
Write on

~Miss Nana Carmine

[ELii]

This was a touching poem. Your poem flowed well. I dont think you need to crawl under the Earth and hide. Cant wait to hear more.

[SciFiGuy]

WOW!! I've just recieved a most serious surge of goosebumps after reading that piece! Awesome! The 'do you remember' is an awesome touch, like the anchor that holds the piece to the present while you explore this perfect memory(ies). I especially love the effect the last line has! so please don't crawl under the Earth just yet!

[Nelson]

This was sincere and thoughtful. I could see in my eyes a couple that has been hard times, but just being near each other soothe all hurts and pains. They love they shared was a drug that neither was ready to get off of. There is no reason to pick this a part for would destroy the whole poem, and don't take criticism so hard. You must always remember there are some jackasses in this world who would do anything to put someone down. But you have no reason to worry, this poem is to good for even a jackass to find something wrong with. I hope to read more from you