You Tell Me Not To Be

You Tell Me Not To Be

You tell me not to be

but I am.

And this wasn’t the plan

This wasn’t it all.

No, not at all.

but I became like this 

in time.

You would have too,

but you won’t believe,

Won’t believe 

this could ever happen

to you.

You’ve not reached 

the fever pitch.

Nerves so tightly wound, 

you can’t make a sound.

Desperation coursing through my veins

Red-hot flames spread

spread, spreading all over.

No, I’ll never be

Never be the same.

You tell me not to be.

But I am.

I am.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Who can be the same after reading words like this...A wonderful poem...:)..........

[Diana]

Thank you, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...Any time...:)....................

[Mutasa]

so cool and i love the flow of the poem

[Jack...]

Very cool. I like the entire feel of this poem. It is like a melodic conversation. Very nicely done.

[Diana]

Thank you. Melodic...good word.

[Ciara Di Salle]

I love that line... "You tell me not to be./ But I am." I think everyone can relate to that at some point

[Diana]

Glad you found it relatable. Thanks!

[Zan]

I really like the repetition, it works well. i noticed it in some of your other poems too and its just great - you've found a way to repeat things so it makes them more powerful and not just annoying. good job!

[Diana]

Well, I'm glad it's more than annoying. Hah hah.

[Zan]

that may not have come out quite right but you know what i mean :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the more someone tells us not to be, the more we are.

exactly...it is tough when others try to control us.

i like the repetition in this..works well.

[Diana]

Nice insight. Telling someone not to be is a form of trying to get them to adhere to your own expectations- a.k.a. controlling them.