A Man Who Was Broken

Even a stranger can make a difference...

I was walking down an aisle

And outside I noticed this old man

He was sitting on the corner

As he motioned his hand

I looked around the store

Then realized he wanted me

Curious as to what he wanted

I went up to he.

 

No fear traveled my body

Nor did any doubts

So as I went to his side

Kneeled down and crouched

He reached into his pocket

And a note he pulled out

No words would he speak

No sounds from his mouth

Though his warm light brown eyes

Spoke to me.

 

A few moments of silence

I was unsure of what he wanted

"Open the letter, maddam"

Were the only words spoken

"Who are you?" I asked aloud

He pointed to the paper

And on it said:

"A Man Who Was Broken"

Saddened by the title

I looked up to this old man

With my watery blue eyes

"Please read it, for you'll understand."

So I opened up this note

And I began to read:

"I once was lost before I met you

I had no idea what I was here for

This earth was so cold and darkly blue

Until I met the woman I adore

You helped me through the darkest nights

And gave me a light to see

I struggled a thousand and one fights

Until you made this man in me

I loved you from the beginning

And I loved you till the end

Don't ask anybody questions

Not even your friends

For though I left your side

It was for your own good

Just picture me at night

I'll always be looking over you

Our love was too strong to break

No matter what they tried to do

Yet God is calling me, babe

And I guess my time is through

I couldn't give you this letter

For I don't want to see you in tears

So I found this beautiful lady

Who will give you this my dear

She'll be your friend

For this I'm sure

For looking in her eyes

I knew her heart was pure

I love you, and I forever will

Please don't give up on us

For even though we're apart

I know you can feel my love."

 

And at that moment

My heart began to melt

As this man grabbed my hand

And a hug was felt

He laid his head on my shoulders

With one palm in mine

"Please give her this letter

And be her friend for life

For she's a wonderful woman

And I think you'd be quite

A good friend for the love of my life"

And as I made him this promise

In my arms he died.

 

I gave the letter to the woman

Such a beautiful old lady she was

And best friends we became

A mother - daughter love

Is what we had to gain

She's told me stories of that man

Who was a hero in her eyes

And we won't let eachother forget

That wonderful man to, her and I.

Reviews

[DrumMajorPod]

I almost cried. =[ It is such a charming tale.. full of an undying love, and one man's desire to show his love for his lady. How can you express such great emotion?

You know... a good poet can make another feel emotion. However, an exceptionally gifted crafter of words such as yourself.. you can not only make others feel emotion, but cry or laugh because of it as well.

I am impressed. Excellent work.

[Akasha]

This piece is amazing.
Wonderful work.

[Sarah]

Aw, this is really sweet & heart-breaking.^^ Very nicely written - I love sad tales with happy endings!

[Tara Jean Olson]

i had no idea what i was getting into as i read this...i loved every thing about it.

[Nassira]

Such a beautiful story full of compassion and emotions. You have written this poem with so much sensitivity and care ... Your talent in writing is obvious and the intention pure. Thank you for sharing with us :) I enjoyed reading your write very much!

[Danielle]

A very pretty tale. One of the better poems I've read actually. I liked the poem the old man wrote the most, out of this whole piece. Very nice.

[Jane Doe]

Simply amazing. I loved this piece, it is so tender and full of love and hope. Another wonderful write!

Good form, choice of words, and format

good rhythm and well imparted message.

This is a good piece

[Rhine Wolf]

I had to fight back tears so that I could read it to the end! Beautifully written!! thank you sharing your gift with us!

[Douglas S. Williams]

This was a great read. very emotional. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for telling me about this.