Ring a ling ding ding...

Ring a ling ding ding...

heart beat...beat

flip up the cell

stomach turn around

heart sinks

it's not who

you

why?

leave me...

here to ponder

what you do

do

do i ask too much?

just to stay in touch?

boo--hoo

to me

only you'll see

what can happen

to us

our love

love me?

love you.

i do

why don't you...........

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

a style that sort of just came to me...let me know what you think

Reviews

[Steven Szepietowski]

brilliant. And a little catchy, very song like. i feel a melody out there for these words. I love the semi-answering of one's own questions, in particulars to love. It is a sad business this love, and I have to admit, I feel the frustration of this poem. And that means you've gotten a good thing here, no matter what it may sound like. I happen to have a big love for onamatopeia.

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Wow.... I know how you feel.... well... not really cause i'm not you... but you know what i mean.... It's heart breaking when someone doesn't love you when you love them.... but one thing to remember love isn't a one way street....

I like the style... You should make it prettier lol.... like a different font or something.... I don't know... it just seems like it needs a different font lol...

GREAT JOB!! I really like it...