Selfless tears

The surf of our soul...tears

Selfless Tears

I watch you 
An unselfconscious moment
Your tears well up
Gather on your eyelid
Cling to your lashes
Perfect crystal pearls
Before spilling down your cheek
A single stream
Around the corner of your mouth
Past your gently trembling lips
To your chin where they linger
Form a drop that clings...
Just a moment
Then becomes a drip
A tear stain on your blouse
Your eyes seem iridescent
They glisten when you weep
Become so...so...blue
You realize I stare
And wipe them away
The moment gone
Forever

Reviews

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so touching..and soft..well penned

[FlawedByDesign]

So much hides in the tears of a woman and with them they carry a world of emotion and stories, a lifetime old. When those tears drip, everything contained within shatters, disappearing, "the moment gone forever".

This reminds me of a piece I wrote few weeks back called, "A WOMAN'S TEARS" so I invite you to read it.

Nicely done.

[the_stoic]

well i completely agree with selene that the attention to detail just shows .. tears are a great way to ease off one's pain but only if there is a loving soul close by to wipe them away . glad that your protagonist has one ! nice write

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

descriptive details spread in beauty as could only be done by the rare man who pays attention to every single nuance that animates his love~ beautiful~

[deeps]

This is quite the intersting read.
Feelings well expressed.

[Winterflower]

The poem captures a moment, a rather mundane one, but nevertheless your shot by shot analysis of a person beginning to cry is intriguing. I hope I am not too harsh in saying that the setting and the imagery is a bit cliché. Try using stunning images, use images derived from the aural, gustatory and olfactlory senses, not just the visual. For example, "Perfect crystal pearls" is a somewhat common image used in poetry and could be substituted for something more interesting(I'm sorry I have no suggestions at the moment, but hopefully I made my point clear). There also seems to be a little spelling mistake with "irradescent", you probably mean iridescent?