Between

Self pity
got plenty.
Self help
ran empty.

Half time
in doubt.
Half hearted
maxed out.

Open doors
gone dreaming.
Open arms
broken meaning.

Locked out
for daring.
Locked away
left caring.

Heart felt
can't describe.
Heart broken
don't decide.

Reviews

[Samith Pich]

Cool poem Lottie, though it could be quite a deep poem I found ironic twists in it, as if it were slightly subversing itself. The start was very good

Self pity
got plenty.
Self help
ran empty.

Sounds like something I'd love on my t-shirt! Often people have told me they actually feel worse after reading some 'self-help' books and that line really resonates with me.

I'm unsure if the last line should have been 'can't decide' or should it stay, but that's only my opinion on it.

Thanks for sharing

Samith

[Que]

Beautiful poem!
Great job :)
Cheers

[Clarisse Nanoit]

love the flow and rhythm, but I'm afraid some of the meaning might be lost in that. Perhaps not. But I don't like the last line. It leaves something to be desired. I don't feel it makes the poem complete. That might just be me, though. I really loved reading, though. =) Thanks to Kristin Brecoe for sharing!
KH

[Georgia Gypsy]

This is a brilliant! The fact that you said so much with few words is outstanding!!
I love how well it flows as well!!:)
Great Job!!
-Kelli

[Kristin Brecoe]

this is absolutely fabulous.

the simplicity of it just soars. I am going to send this to a few friends.