Haiti

Haiti

A Poem by Lottie
"

I tried to go on the media's perspective of it.

"
Ordinary Tuesday under the surface.
Put into the hands of fate.
Wishful rumours
and thrown into time too late.

Crumbled hearts under the rubble.
Put into the hands of others.
Hopeful rebirth
and delived into place for mothers.

Unique world under the sky.
Put into the hands of TLC.
Thankful ends
and stepping into light to be free.

© 2010 Lottie


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Lottie
I don't usually do world matters, but I thought I should try something new.

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Great poem.
One thing is that you shouldn't put so much punctuation. Sure, it's for emphasis, but it's best to put as little of it as possible and put it only where it will truly emphasize a most important part. There are natural pauses at the end of the verses, so the periods (and commas) aren't necessary.
Cheers :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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