to know you

i wonder what he would say if he read this one...

Tell me what it is you want

From life

From family

From friends

From me.

Tell me what it is you think

Let me absorb this knowledge

Let me know you as no one else knows you.

Can I see your thoughts

All your hopes and dreams

The darkness I see in your eyes

Played out in plain English for me to know.

I want to know you

On ever level there can possibly be

I wont judge

I wont tell

It can stay just between the two of us

We can be the only ones who know

Let it pull us closer together.

It scares me to not know what it is I see there

Hiding behind your eyes,

The anger

The annoyance

The tiredness

But to never know the reasons for it all.

I don’t mean to ask too much of you

But if you could let me into that shell of yours

The little world you exist in when your so quiet and thoughtful

I would be less scared

Less unsure

And I would know what you want from me.

I just wish to know you

And be able to truly see you.

Please?

Author's Note

anything to say bout it?? feel free to let it fly... and i mean ANYTHING, if you jsut down right hate it... say it :)

Reviews

[Dug]

Ahhhhhh! Everyone is trying to read my thoughts.
Unfortunately, I don't much understand them myself.
It's weird. Most of us hide our true selves. I think most of it comes down to trust. Revealing who you are leaves you wide open. Anyone can use that and break you at will.

Anyways, good work as always, fish.

[CRAZYFACE]

this is an amazing piece. It could apply for anyone out there and you have truly wriiten this well.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I really like this .. it is so poignant and filled with want.. i would love to know a person as well as you describe.. beautifully done ..

Chloe
xoxo

'ever'.. every.. typo ..

[Emily B]

Good work, dear. Words are words are words. We should always embrace them as the truest expression of what we are lately. Not that are words and selves aren't subject to change at the slightest whim.

[Hviske]

very good very good .. its hard sometimes to get to know a person and doesnt matter how long you know that person your never going to get to know that person completely and it makes you want to just ask them straight forward just tell me evrything dang it!! lol .. great write

[Suki]

PSHHHH... GIIIIRRRRLLL . WE ALL WISH IT WAS THAT EASY, BUT IT ISNT.

[TV VOICE OVER GUY]
WILL WE EVER BE ABLE TO BREAK THE BOY CODE? STAY TUNED AND FIND OUT!!!

[CharlieO]

Another interesting write - I was hit hard with anger and confusion.
I like the power in the opening of the poem - all those short lines pack a punch - each one is a blow to the reader - but at the same time there is something very gentle about the way you are asking for some clarification of whta is going on. I really like the final line 'Please' - this didn't really come across as desperate - it was more of a desire to understand - at least this is how I took it - I don't know what you intended.
As I said with the last poem of yours I reviewed I think you have conveyed your emotions well - with a real honesty and feeling. I would love to see the senses here again and some imagery - but I am a sucker for that kind of thing and this is just my personal opinion - you say in your profile that you are looking for ways to improve - this is how I think you could do that.
I do think that you are a good writer - a little like I used to be when I was your age - I lost my knack for poetry - don't lose yours. Sorry to get all personal there.
Congrats on this write - and sorry for my long review. I would love to read more of your work, feel free to add me and send me some read requests.

[The Mad Prophet]

You have alot of intrigueing work. Very good, It flows well, and you expressed what you want out of him.